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Of Pain and Play
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Of Pain and Play |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Walk with me a moment Through the channels of the past See the lies and misconceptions That seem to always last The story was a prism Explanations not revealed Blame is unimportant For that time is truly sealed Beneath the surface frosting Housed illness and naive The need for self autonomy Fight for distance and for need Inside my mind remains The haunt of self reprisal For being what I seemed then Behaviors often primal Perhaps my faulty judgement I say, oh yes, and no It takes the two to tango My part I only know What really is important That someone wins the day Or that memories existed Some of pain and some of play You may wish it different It was so short a time Let me keep my sad beginning Relax, it's only rhyme |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Amusemi, This poem has good rhythm, and cadence. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
easy read with a great ending...enjoyed |
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Freely_expressing Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 69NSW, Australia |
Hey I really liked the rhythm in your poem, i find some poems can be a bit disjointed. But that flowed so welll and had some really neat concepts! thanx for the read  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Read! ARCTIC WIND |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"The story was a prism Explanations not revealed" Enjoyed the stroll through the past. Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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