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Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
chandelier teardrops fall into a pool of molten starlight and disappear inside, pain explodes spiderwebs of white light the cold fingers that touch cannot soothe milky pools of liquid soul pleading with their reflection trying to fill the emptiness with their own blood watch strangers pass by faces painted with broken dreams see the crumbling headstones decorated by dead flowers picking up the pieces of the shattered mirror maybe if we try we can put them back together |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
such a sad song on the blue perhaps we can let the light return |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
first let me welcome you to PiP, and then let me say how much I liked your write...it is really good...so much depth in your word choices...so much creativity in crafting your phrases...so many places to highlight, but this one is outstanding: "milky pools of liquid soul pleading with their reflection" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Dreamflight - read the words and felt them. Glad I stopped by... BC |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think you have such a wonderful and different way with words, always enjoy everything you write. Ida |
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Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
Thanks for the comments, I like knowing I'm being read.  |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"milky pools of liquid soul pleading with their reflection" Great phrasing here, and I enjoyed the positive ending, too. Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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