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steavenr
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0 posted 2008-10-29 09:04 AM



crooked blue, white-water drafting
banks along a share-cropped row
drifting dreams like dandelion spurs
carries waters from fresh-fallen snow

rippled blue, subtle waters stealing
life from a liberty not yet sown
sullied lot like a delta's dawning
free-fall waters from a stream unknown

soft-eyed blue, dripped waters sealing
fates of life-times not yet loaned
fresh from thoughts without emotion
rushing o'er its stream-bed stones

steam-mist blue, saddened by its luster
lost on lives without the seeing
sole possessor of nature's call
serenely solving its own being

and the painted sky draws a so clear course
of the silent stream's subtle-soul source

© Copyright 2008 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
Janette
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1 posted 2008-10-29 11:54 AM


This gave me a soft feeling of freedom from physical restraints for the positive enjoyment of "life-times" from your "silent stream's subtle-soul source."

Very interesting write here ... powerful.

Enjoyed!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Marchmadness
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2 posted 2008-10-29 02:15 PM


Soul soothing thoughts and a lovely freedom.
                                      Ida

Sunshine
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3 posted 2008-10-29 02:30 PM


I'm liking this blue of you Steven.

Thank you.


Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2008-10-29 02:38 PM


Rought iron wirh cotton candy guy! N-joyed
Artic Wind
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5 posted 2008-10-29 06:30 PM


Lovely imagery!
~Very much Enjoyed!


ARCTIC WIND

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6 posted 2008-11-01 07:25 PM


You are writing beauty.

A

steavenr
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7 posted 2008-11-01 07:33 PM


Janette,
so glad it touched you and spoke to you in such a powerful way...thanks for your comments

Ida,
nice of you to leave such insightful comments...thanks

Sunshine,
thank you...honored by your gracious remarks

Dark,
cool way of responding...taken appreciatively

Artic,
thank you so much

Alison,
I am honored by your comment...thank you kindly

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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8 posted 2008-11-01 07:54 PM


Steaven... you are one of my favourite poets on here and I so enjoyed this beautiful offering from you to us...  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

steavenr
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9 posted 2008-11-01 08:00 PM


RDB,
I am humbled by your comment...thank you ever so much...my regards to you in the great 'down under'

ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2008-11-01 10:41 PM


The mind wanders, sometimes rivers, sometimes streams...to mist.
Fertile, the wetted lands we plant so close to the edges of our wishes.  
Cleansing, like after the rains.

steavenr
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11 posted 2008-11-01 10:46 PM


TD,
you have caught the essence of this...I am honored

Callista
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12 posted 2008-11-02 09:53 PM


A common theme captured in a fresh and captivating way. Words are also my soul's renewal. Thank you for yours.

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

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