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Where Do You Go Now?
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Where Do You Go Now? |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Where do you go now, old man? You left your family behind decades ago, living your lies wrapped in layers of insulation Their beliefs now shattered as tears dissolve the love they had for you. So, I ask you, old man, where do you go now? You’ve become a lonely paper doll, creased and ragged behind curtains of deceit, now a caricature of who you wanted us to see. All those decades behind you shattered. The few years before you clouded. You, who hated to be alone, will be alone. How smug you once were surrounded by family. They forgave you of bigotry and cruelty, honoring you as a father should be honored. They taught their children to love you and they tried to shield them from your faults And now? Now, they cry knowing that they failed and they remember things long forgotten and they wonder things they never thought to wonder. And they rebuild faith in family without you. Again, I ask you, Where do you go now, old man? Where do you go now? - Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
lots of pain here, feelings that are hard to even fathom...a very personal write...thank you for sharing...it is extremely well written |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Oh Alison you paint such a sad picture here, very poignant and so well written but that is a picture that is so often played out in life. In my humble opinion it is one of your best posts ever, thanks for sharing. love to you dear lady. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very sad and powerful writing, Alison. No matter what people think the chickens always come home to roost. ida |
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Stacey011 Junior Member
since 2008-10-27
Posts 18Australia |
WOW! This has to be one of the best poems i have ever read. It is so powerful, and so true. I can't tell you how much it paints the picture of part of my own life. How wonderful. I could never put it into words, and you, have just done so, for me. Thank you! How wonderful such a sad poem can make me feel. |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Oh my Alison. Such a sad poem but so well written as usual. ooxx __________________________ |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ali-girl...a wonderful write... sending some of my special RDB hugs your way .. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alison - such powerful emotions coming out in words as these. Write on, the pain will leave in time... BC |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
this hurts  The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This tugs so hard at the heart, Alison. One can feel every word and the saddness therein. An emotional write to be sure!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
If you ever wan to start a poetry workshop on free verse, I'll be happy to be a student! Beautiful writing, my friend  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I know two "old men"... Beautiful writing.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
vanity is the key of loneliness. thanks for the beautiful and thoughtful poem. yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, A bad Dad still beats no Dad at all. Love Bobby |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Steaven, Thank you for reading and understanding. Yes, it is deeply personal, but pain sometimes eases when it is released. Alison - Lindsay, Thank you for reading and for your kind words about the quality of the poem. Maybe sometime we just strip away the fluff and the rest shines on its own. Don't know. Alison - Ida, You are right. The entire hen house came home to roost and then flew the coop. Alison - Stacey, I am glad that my words touched you. Thank you for reading and taking the time to let me know. Alison - Misty Lilacs, Thank you for the warmth of your reply. Alison - RDB, Your hugs arrived filled with love. Thank you for them - they wrapped around me nicely. Love, Ali - BC Yes, the pain eases - and I think the writing helps it. Thank you lots. Alison - Kristen, Thank you and hugs right backatcha. Alison - Blues Serenade, Thank you. Your comments always make me feel a bit of warmth from the words you write. Alison - Balladeer, Thank you. Now please help me get back on track with the assignments. I miss them, but it's hard to knuckle down. Alison - Susan, I know more than two, unfortunately. Thank you. Alison - Yann, Thank you lots. Alison - Bobby, Oh man. You know I respect you a lot, but you are wrong on this one. Dead wrong. Alison |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, James. Alison |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Emotion is always a good thing to get out to the world, theres always a healing touch when that happens!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Very true, AW. Thank you. A |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Very sad, but beautifully written, Alison. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Oklahoma Rose. Alison |
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