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| Open Poetry #43 |
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streetlight yearnings |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Last night I sat here in the dark. (smoking is my quiet angst) I watched the waft from cigarettes gracefully in curlicued blue trace visions in the air centered in my livingroom illuminated by the sly streetlight yearning through the screen as porches burned their signals "on": These houses had "home dignity". "Quiet..." I said to the dog, (unusal for Saturday) Then she sighed the bad girl sigh as if she'd been reproved and placed her head upon her paws determined to be good and I completely understood. I am quite often much confused regarding bad and good and truth dismissing all as "absolute" embracing lies defining me renegotiating moods weary of the duties due and differences of want and need. Stubbing out the cigarette sparkless in the death of it. I took the pins out of my hair shook my hair loose, then undressed, pausing to assess my breasts, shrugging at the sight of them. I pulled a gown over my head bunching pillows, comfortless, I felt no need to pray nor cry; one hand placed beneath my head the other patted emptiness, then clutched the bear of compromise. I fell asleep detached from me, wondering which day I'd died and how it all came down to this... |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"renegotiating moods" Please renegotiate soon! Why? Cause I really find much interest and thought-filled entertainment in your pen...including this piece. Oh! This ending ... well ... please hurry and think this through and then renegotiate that mood. Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
hey sweet pea i do have cuffs AND a gun and gaters aren't too fussy 'bout whats for dinner and you KNOW that i DO know and a chill ran up my neck |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Cheer up.. You don't have a 20 page paper to write by tomorrow. ).: But I probabaly would be depressed without that too. It's a good thing it's fall. I love fall time. -Juju |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Hey, I know this story (without the dog and the cigarette.) Cats are good listeners too. The vocabulary is a bit limited though. Ida |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
Juju is write lol |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Juju? Don't assume that I don't.  I appreciate the read under such time constraints, however. Thanks to all.  (even the dark star editor)*grins* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
one hand placed beneath my head the other patted emptiness, then clutched the bear of compromise. I fell asleep detached from me, wondering which day I'd died and how it all came down to this... Ye gads, gal... If I could write as well as you, I could have written those exact lines... well... substituting longsuffering cats for dog... and well... I don't smoke... but truly... Next time I feel like this? I'll read you and know I'm not alone... nor quite dead yet. Because to appreciate is to live, right? *S* Well... I'm appreciating you. *S* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I fell asleep detached from me, wondering which day I'd died and how it all came down to this..." ah...yes.."detached from me" says it so well..most days I ask myself, "what the hell happened to me?" happiness seems so fleeting...  love you to the moon and back again."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Once again he finds himself leaning under the corner street light in top hat and 3 piece, horse and buggy waiting for the window to offer a smile and a sigh, but finds the drapes once again closed ... wondering when he will inherit that dance. ---------------------------------------- I do so love where your words take me, though sometimes the path winds around a bit... but that is probably because I find myself walking with eyes closed most times. You do yearn so well when it comes to the deep look. Wonderful as always. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling... thanks guys for reading, and Mark? That was a very charming reply. You should WRITE that. My love to you all.  |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Serenity--I've been away for another long stretch--but I always look for you when I come back to the pages--because you write the bare truth! Loved it! Bridget P.S. You ain't lost it, girlfriend. Just having weary thoughts! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - sat and had thoughts such as these, only you wrote down what you felt with meaning. Nice write... BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks, and HEY--why didn't somebody tell me I left out a "u" in unusual? Sheesh! and thank you... *shrug* I tried to fix it, but I am ever "late again". Thanks again, you two! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I am quite often much confused regarding bad and good and truth dismissing all as "absolute" embracing lies defining me renegotiating moods weary of the duties due and differences of want and need You're quite deep but then you are an excellent poet....Good to read your words again. Eric |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed your thoughts Karen!  ARCTIC WIND |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Only you could have written this. Loved it and you,"late" |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful read Karen... I love reading all your beautiful work! love RDB oh, and I'm sure I would have pointed out that missing 'u'...I'm good like that! LOL! so modest too! xxx Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, I read this a while ago, at a time that I was too stressed (and rushed) to reply to any poems and planned to come back so here I am. Firstly as a poem, it is brilliantly written, as usual. I don't think you were even thinking of creating art on this occasion, but nevertheless your brilliance cannot be suppressed, and it pervades everything you write. You see, the poem is about your thoughts - and your thoughts have to be via your brain and imagination - and your brain and imagination are so developed and creative, that every delicate nuance of your thoughts is so expressive, sensitive, graphic, intelligent and beautiful, that your readers are put on a violin-string-vibration connection to each path in your multi-pathed poem and we become you (and your dog) as we read. I would imagine that the reason why nobody told you about the typo in "unusual", is that none of us saw it (and as an ex-teacher, and long before I was a teacher, I saw pretty much every typo or misspelling that ever I read immediately, but I didn't see this one) because we, your readers, were too high on the violin-string-vibration connection with you (and your dog), in your poem - and the words were merely a means of reaching the feelings and images that we hungrily absorbed. Secondly, as regards your feeling this way, it pains me deeply, and I don't know what to say, firstly to make you feel better for the moment, and secondly to make you feel better on a longer term, and I feel helpless. All I know is that I don't want you to feel this way, nor any of the other people who have responded saying they know the feeling. Warm heart-huggles - Owl |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You're writing a 20 page essay? Awesome dudette! This dear K, was an excellent poem and Mark is right - man, there is no one yearns as you do (in writing that is.) |
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