Lines Borrowed From A Letter

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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2008-10-25 10:53 AM

Lines Borrowed From A Letter

we lose our grip
we let go
true
had I let you slip
from the edge
of my fingers
it was my fault
I admit I am guilty
and here I am
pouring on you
like some liquid skin
the raw edge
of something missing
how can I explain
reasons of deserve
when mistake to mistake
stand stacked up
volume after volume
strewn about
cluttering any path
of nothing to offer
in my deserve
you deserve better
I am nothing more
than poetic verse
and these words
are all I am
and all I have
would it be enough

"no darkness has ever been deep enough to extinguish my personal knowledge of love" Anne Rice

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-10-25 11:04 AM

a powerful, insightful write with some thought-provoking images, but you sell yourself far too short (in my humble opinion)...worth is so subjective

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

2 posted 2008-10-25 12:30 PM

This made me think that holding-on should be good enough.

Enjoyed!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2008-10-25 06:45 PM

Nice...James

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2008-10-25 09:05 PM

A powerful Write Indeed! Mmhmmm

ARCTIC WIND

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2008-10-27 05:13 PM

1slick_lady - always with feelings, and from within. Your writings always say something special...

BC

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2008-10-27 05:30 PM

Guilt is a powerful emotion that is more likely than not a two-way street but with one person accepting all of the blame.
Ida

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

7 posted 2008-10-27 06:08 PM

awww!! Sorry this makes reminds me of someone...

The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone.

threadbear
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since 2008-07-10

Posts 817
Indy

8 posted 2008-10-28 01:12 AM

and these line are all that I am.

You've hit on a major reason why poets write, 1Slick1!

beautifully and instinctively written!
tb

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2008-10-28 08:33 AM

I am nothing more
than poetic verse
***********************
and that says it all
summed up
like this a lot

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2008-10-28 09:13 AM

Those that write the verse tend to be and feel so much more...

It does not make you but rather is a part of you. Anyone that can't see that doesn't get it or you.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

11 posted 2008-10-28 03:43 PM

I admit I am guilty
and here I am
pouring on you
like some liquid skin
the raw edge
of something missing
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The above lines carry some powerful images and emotions with them and then your ending . . .

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I am nothing more
than poetic verse
and these words
are all I am
and all I have
would it be enough
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In order to have the words and verse, you have to have the heart and soul to understand, feel, and convey, so maybe there is more to you than you realize.

I enjoyed much

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