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steavenr
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0 posted 2008-10-23 11:13 AM



silken shades of light's debris
scatter shards of illuminosity

soft it falls on lovers twain
gilding a silent, safron refrain

with blue of eyes and moon-lit brown
it spreads its radiance all around

and eyes of yes meet nods of same
the wild of love it cannot tame

so rose of cheek yields its satin soul
as words bespeak their heart-warmed goal

he holds her tight with tender charms
she holds him close within her arms

while silken shades of light's debris
host their love-fest for eternity

© Copyright 2008 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2008-10-23 01:18 PM


An hourglass curve, holding precious the moments best savored warm.
You write romance so well.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2008-10-23 01:26 PM


Very nice.

I've been eyeing up the couplets thing for a bit, and this is a lovely example for me to study.

Thank you steavenr. Enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2008-10-23 07:03 PM


Rhyming Couplets on couplings! Very apropos!

"he holds her tight with tender charms
she holds him close within her arms" ~ Perfectly loverly!


Linda

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4 posted 2008-10-24 01:25 AM


Just the right amount of romance, perfect.
                                    Ida

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5 posted 2008-10-24 12:01 PM


I enjoyed this accumulation of "shades of light's debris"
Charmingly romantic, just the way I like it.

Enjoyed!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

2islander2
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6 posted 2008-10-24 04:38 PM


beautiful romance with beautiful words, i enjoyed the serenity of it all.

yann

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7 posted 2008-10-24 06:46 PM


good read
steavenr
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8 posted 2008-10-24 09:56 PM


TD,
thank you so much...thought it looked better centered and never even gave it another thought

serenity,
so glad this gives you something to study & look at...I am honored...the title was just a play on words for the form

Linda,
glad you liked that line...it sorta just tumbled out like that and after I read it a couple of times, I left it and liked it too

Ida,
never thought of it like that, but nice thought about just the right amount of romance

Janette,
thank you...the accumulation was just my attempt to tie it all together...thanks for noticing

yann,
good romance always has an aspect of serenity in it...thank you for your gracious comment

vandana,
appreciate your reading and commenting

LindsayP
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9 posted 2008-10-25 12:19 PM



Steaven, that is such a sweet tender poem
and very romantic. Well written. Take care.

Lindsay

steavenr
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10 posted 2008-10-25 12:54 PM


Lindsay,
I appreciate the very kind comments...thank you

Artic Wind
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11 posted 2008-10-25 09:16 PM


I always enjoy your poetic poems! This was double the good~!!!


ARCTIC WIND

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