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Not So Old
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Not So Old |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria 
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My last poem was a little depressing so I thought I had better give you a smile with this one. Not So Old An old man was travelling home on a train, He was lucky to get the last seat, For the train was packed at that time of day And to sit down was the ultimate treat. At the third or fourth stop a young lady stepped in But a seat she was unable to find, The heavy parcels she had , weighed her down rather bad And not one person there, tried to be kind. Now this old fellow, being the gent that he was, Gently tapped her then on her hand, He said, “I’m so sorry Miss, I can’t give up my seat, I’m much to old and decrepit to stand.” She smiled at him then, and said she’d be okay, She was resolved to the fact of no seat, But as the train rolled along, he could see something was wrong For she seemed to be out on her feet. Now she was a beauty, all willowy slim, With a figure that would gladden the glance, But not one fellow there would give up his seat, But I’m sure they all thought of romance. The train rattled on , on it’s homeward bound run And still there was no available seat, The old man then said, “my dear, you can sit on my lap, It will help ease the weight off your feet.” She looked at him then, with a shy tender smile And thanked him for being so kind, She said , “yes, it certainly would be a big help And I will, if you don’t really mind.” As she sat there, he looked at her hair, A sight that all men would acclaim, And her beautiful smile was like one long ago And it rekindled that flicker of flame. As his mind wandered back to the days of his youth, To the age when he was twenty and three, When he took his young wife, the pride of his life, But who was now just a fond memory. Her perfume was like heaven , all scented with spice And his blood pressure started to rise, Then he said, “quick young lady, please hop off my lap For I feel that I’ve been telling you lies.” She jumped to her feet, with concern on her face As she clutched at the parcels she’d bought, The old man stood up and said, “you have my seat For I’m just not as old as I thought.” Lindsay P Wilson |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
LindsayP - yes, this is a smiler for sure.. BC |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...and a smile broadens as his thoughts race...and as the old man says, "nuff said" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you, dear Lindsay, for the smiles! The fun story holds its lessons too! Love, Margherita  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo LindsayP, Well, that just goes to show, good things do happen to good people. Bobby |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
And you start my day with a smile!!! Thank you, my friend. Love A |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Huge smile from ear to ear Hope |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Lindsay I just loved it mate, you are so good at these, have a great day and see you soon. Rick |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
To my good friends Bill, Steaven, Bobby, Margherita, Alison, Hope and Rick, your kind comments are always so much appreciated and I thank you all. Have a great day folks. Lindsay |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I LOVED it! That one sure appeals to my naughty sense of humour!!! How delightfully charming!  In doing her a favour ~ she unwittingly did one for him! lol Love 'n Laughter to you, my Aussie friend! Linda  |
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TRACE2RYM Junior Member
since 2008-10-09
Posts 38 |
A gentleman always gets (it) up for a pretty lady. |
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tsu Junior Member
since 2008-10-20
Posts 29u.k. |
ah..what a gentleman,what a poem and thankyou for the smile! that was a wonderful tale |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Linda and Trace, Tsu and Vandana a sincere thank you to all you kind folks for your generous comments, and a big welcome to Pip for Trace and Tsu. Take care. Lindsay |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
LOL see, you put a all the time!!!ARCTIC WIND |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Thanks Michael for you comments Have a great day my friend. Lindsay |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
A delightful tale! Yes! Very entertaining indeed. Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Not only a great tale, but with the respects of chivalry built in. A wonderful read for me and now suddenly I feel much younger myself. Very well done. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Thanks Janette, I'm so glad that you enjoyed the tale. That story is supposed to be true. It was written in Bert Facey's autobiography when he was a conductor on a tram in Perth. It was a story that I turned into a poem. Mark I'm so glad you felt younger after reading the poem my friend. It's marvellous what a lovely young blonde can do for your thinking and memory. Thanks heaps for taking the time to comment. Lindsay |
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