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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2008-10-21 08:43 AM



She spreads her wings
spanning higher ground
for a branch that will hold
providing shelter from the storm
instead of becoming one
with the run off.

Where a fly by night
flies by night
slapping flies on the wall
and time gets away
behind clouds
and assorted cloaks
that fall from grace.

While banging his head
against window sills
feigning a jilted lover
makes me wonder
about trees that need watering
not the ones wrapped in cellophane
for some kind of perverse pleasure
that flies by night.



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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
1 posted 2008-10-21 12:53 PM



With their magic branches
trees tap the sky
transforming our tears
into glorious cloaks
of the nightstorm
***********************

the little blonde birdie will shake off the storms afterall
afterall


Ericc
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2 posted 2008-10-21 01:26 PM


Excellent write!

Eric

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-10-21 02:12 PM


Ms bluezy, it sure is fun to watch you dance. Enjoyed this, I think I know her.
WTBAKELAR
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4 posted 2008-10-21 02:33 PM


I enjoy this,  But I think I need a Thesaurus to help me understand it.
Or maybe It just needs to be, to be enjoyed.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2008-10-21 05:20 PM


The measureable parts of relationships seem to get much more complicated with each moment of passing time.  In many ways I can relate to what you have penned here.  I don't know that they are the same as yours but I can relate to my own.  I will definitely have to reread a few times.  Very much enjoyed.
Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2008-10-21 06:18 PM


I detect a certain sinister sound in this composition, but the main tone I perceive is unmistakably related to conscious feminine power.

Great write.

Love,
Margherita


steavenr
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7 posted 2008-10-21 07:50 PM


"assorted cloaks
that fall from grace"

interesting, thought-provoking perspective

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
8 posted 2008-10-21 10:01 PM


BluesSerenade - enjoyed reading this, you do have a way with words...

BC

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
9 posted 2008-10-22 07:34 PM


Wonderful!


ARCTIC WIND

Honeybunch
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10 posted 2008-10-23 02:19 PM


"She spreads her wings
spanning higher ground
for a branch that will hold
providing shelter from the storm
instead of becoming one
with the run off."

Bluesy gal - This I understand only too well.  I don't know much but I do know that the branch was found.  Keep writing because you do it so well - you always have, you know.


Helen

Pilgrimage
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11 posted 2008-10-23 05:36 PM


Oh I like the way you move from one meaning to another, and you keep me hopping along behind you.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
12 posted 2008-10-23 06:27 PM


"She spreads her wings
spanning higher ground
for a branch that will hold"

~ As soon as I started reading, the above lines had already given me pause in ponder. I too have done likewise, but alas, there have been times when the branch did not hold...

May your wings keep you flying high and free and above the madding crowds!


Linda


Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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13 posted 2008-10-24 12:46 PM


Sounds like a strong woman, having her say, to me. Saying it very well.
                                Ida

Janette
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14 posted 2008-10-24 04:37 PM


"and time gets away
behind clouds
and assorted cloaks
that fall from grace."

    Wow, so many juicy lines in this write!

"about trees that need watering
not the ones wrapped in cellophane"

Dang! lady I just read this entire thing again ... mercy ... for me this piece radiates with double entendre and boundless interpretations.  Wow, I definitely adore reading something that does not limit one's mind with boundaries.  Enjoyed!

Excellent write!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

vandana
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15 posted 2008-10-24 06:46 PM


nice
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
16 posted 2008-10-24 07:23 PM


Enjoyed, my friend, in particular the first stanza ... and of course the new (to me anyway) picture....

jimmy

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
17 posted 2009-01-01 05:46 AM


You need to fly by more often

Happy New Year, Lor

M

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
18 posted 2009-01-03 03:27 PM


I agree with Maureen.  You should rest your wings and treat us with something to read.  
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