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steavenr
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0 posted 2008-10-20 12:29 PM



can't wait for the rain, my love, can't wait
can't find time for the tears to flow, can't wait
no time for cleansing, no time for refreshing
can't wait for the rain, my love, can't wait

my heart beats to the patter of the drizzled rain
consoling, slyly beating, feigning its rhythm
like the gentle spin of a weather vane
in a soft summer breeze at the dusk of day

can't tell the diff'rence 'tween the heart-flow
and the pitter-pattern of the clouded tears
sounding like the soft rain's gentle breath
still can't wait for the rain, my love, still can't wait

and the wise man cries what the sage writes down
can't wait for the rain, my love, can't wait

© Copyright 2008 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-10-20 03:33 AM


Steaven.. you write with passion and beauty...I'm so pleased that Marchmadness inspired such beautiful words from you... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
2 posted 2008-10-20 03:39 AM


What more can a girl from Oregon ask for than to inspire a poem called "Can't wait for the rain." I am honored to have inspired your beautiful words.
                               Ida

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
3 posted 2008-10-20 07:09 AM


Loved the rhythm of this one, as you do such justice to the patter of the rain.
Lovely inspired write.

steavenr
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4 posted 2008-10-20 01:48 PM


RDB,
you are so very kind and gracious with your generous comments...glad you liked it

Ida,
simply my pleasure, but then again, your words captured my thoughts...should have challenged you to follow your words to fruition...now that would have been good

TD,
if you think that the rhythm captured the rhythm of the rain, then I can feel like I succeeded...surely appreciate your kind comments

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
5 posted 2008-10-20 03:06 PM


Enjoyed this, Steaven!  When we feel we can't wait for something then we are forced to learn the lesson of patience - just seems to work that way I think.

Helen

steavenr
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6 posted 2008-10-20 03:12 PM


Helen,
oh, the lessons of patience...if we could all be guilty of learning...thanks for reading and commenting

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