Open Poetry #43 |
Dazzling Daisy (an attempted ode) |
kanashe Member
since 2008-05-21
Posts 59america |
dear dazzling daisy with your golden pedals so bright, can you feel the icy brezze while danceing lithely in the fading sunlight? will you grow any taller chasing colorful butterflies or are you perfect, lovely daisy, are you just right? how soft your pretty pedals feel pressed between the pale skin of my fingertips, like and expensive silk, imported from the best. do you mind pretty flower if i take you home? for the winter winds have suddenly begun to blow. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
kanashe - I'm sure those daisy's are feeling the gentle words of this write... BC |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Kanashe, This is fairly good. Of course, I think it would be better in Standard English Punctuation and capitalization. I always say that, and always will. Check out some of John Keats Odes, he was an expert on odes. Bobby |
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