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Pale Thighs and a Tattered Beard
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Pale Thighs and a Tattered Beard |
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njr1025 New Member
since 2008-10-15
Posts 3 |
Interior entropy: an amphetamine over-animated the anxious soul A shaky-voiced singer soothes a bond with his words Chills shoot great lengths - one bright eye to the next Further than the love I poured Warm the chills and make it false? Fire it the thousand miles! It will reach! It is the longing that wreaks winter in us, you say Well, you split the sea and have sunken me The page is now the only friend, the only lover The page and the doctor and his couch I crave To burn clean this dead-skinned masquerade A romantic rooted among stones and vultures Feel the sting of loneliness hatch pale thighs and a tattered beard Voided in despair ten more months A lake that can end at a river? The tapered escape will widen at launch Glaring clocks can’t speed Patience impossible on amphetamines; the need For this fire to devour the life that is your lips I wait – a cripple limping across months A victim of youth; a self-consuming shriek: A cold boy awaiting your warmth |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
interesting. very interesting. wordy, but interesting. Tupac is interfering with my understanding, I'll go back and read this once Machiavelli is done spitting rhymes. i like this though. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
..."For this fire to devour the life that is your lips I wait – a cripple limping across months A victim of youth; a self-consuming shriek: A cold boy awaiting your warmth" The intricate explosion of emotions here is superb. I had to go back twice to choose a favorite line. Riveting verse. Welcome to Passions. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"It is the longing that wreaks winter in us, you say Well, you split the sea and have sunken me" Passionate, intense emoting here! Looking forward to more from you. Welcome to Passions.  |
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njr1025 New Member
since 2008-10-15
Posts 3 |
Thank you all for the warm welcome and the comments. I'd love to hear anything else you'd like to say.  |
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