Open Poetry #43 |
Spun Twilight |
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A yellow orchard cascades over the hills where the sun slants against the wind and leans into the fading clouds free falling into white ivory. Like sweet cream stirs the shoreline blue and distant white caps sweep the sand dunes airbrushed in rieslings brazen and bronzed. I am reminded of sea glass and the pastel shade of time seeping into the sunset like spun twilight you were the elusive pearl in a cove of dreams warm and smooth in the sunlight. I keep your smile in clear view wrapped around the edges of my heart and I miss you in unforeseen moments captured in whispers of a calypso rolling on waves of endless motion set in powder blue and violet jewels. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful and i LOVEEEEEEE the new pic |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Dear Lori, this is exceptional poetic language! When you wrote this you were on an inspirational high. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you ladies~ I appreciate your nice replies very much. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like all of this poem, but I love these lines -- quote: Thank you for sharing this poem. A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I agree with everyone else, you have a way with words in poetic beauty EXCELLENT!!! Happy Fall ARCTIC WIND |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Blues. Your poetry just does it for me. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wow, Bluesy gal! You haven't lost your touch or your looks I might add. Lovely new picture but your words ... ... captured my heart! Wonderful poem! Hugs Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You guys make me so happy. Your comments encourage me in every way, and I thank each of you, sincerely. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Pure poetry, bluesy! Spun 'magic' I'd say. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I keep your smile in clear view wrapped around the edges of my heart and I miss you in unforeseen moments captured in whispers of a calypso rolling on waves of endless motion Reading the above made me sigh... in understanding, in my own missing... and in delight at reading you again! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - wow, great write. While reading I see the words come to life.. Very nice... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you, thank you everybody. I wish you all a whole lotta love!!! |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
i love the poem. it reminds me of the ocean within the twilight. truly my mind, heart, and soul was taken into a far distanced journey |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ken~~ I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for looking me up, I appreciate it very much. ~Welcome to the blue pages~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
This poem sings with joy. Very beautiful like you blondie |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is so cool...couldn't find just one line to highlight...each built excellence upon the next...like getting to the malt in a Friday night shake...better and better with each sip |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Who are you calling blondie, blondie?? I'm so glad you stopped by, thank you. Cool, like a shake? I like that. Thanks steaven |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!! ...and sea glass always brings mixed memories for me, but this time only good ones! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks icebox~ *hug* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A yellow orchard cascades over the hills where the sun slants against the wind and leans into the fading clouds free falling into white ivory. -------------------------------------------- I loved the images in the entire piece and of course with images of shore and sea I couldn't resist. The above verse however left some very beautiful thoughts and pictures in my mind that and left with a good impact. Well done |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Absolutely superb cascading imagery! Wonderful ‘write’! I am especially fond of the beginning: “A yellow orchard cascades over the hills where the sun slants against the wind and leans into the fading clouds free falling into white ivory.” V. serious and long-sustained applause for this grand-fine ‘penning’! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Simply spectacular! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Blues Seranade, that is such a goooood poem, Top accolades for this one my friend, take a bow. Have a great day. Lindsay |
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