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Open Poetry #43

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blackrosepetal
New Member

since 2007-07-12

Posts 7
NY, USA

0 posted 2008-10-14 08:06 PM

Connected to you through
Feelings I can’t control,
It melts and freezes and melts again.

A love so pure, destroyed.
Yet, I keep trying to deny how you feel.
Denial, not good.

Where did “that” guy go?
“That” guy was great.
You are making me blind.
I want to be blind, so I don’t
See the truth.

Lookin’ at others makes me sick.
Does it make you sick?
Do you feel how I feel?

No, don’t think you do.
Will I take you back?
Can I trust you?

Or is everything based on a lie?
Who are you now?

The wind will always blow,
The sun will always shine,
The rain will fall and
So will my heart.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-10-14 08:20 PM

Yo Blackrosepetal,

nice title.

Bobby

blackrosepetal
New Member

since 2007-07-12

Posts 7
NY, USA

2 posted 2008-10-14 08:21 PM

lol...thanks...got a suggestion?

Doing me, it's the best.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2008-10-14 08:25 PM

Dear Blackrosepetal,

No, I have no suggestions.

I would fly into a fury if someone would try to give me a title for a poem, or try to change my poem in any way.

I'm sure someone here will give you a hand.

Love Bobby

blackrosepetal
New Member

since 2007-07-12

Posts 7
NY, USA

4 posted 2008-10-14 08:26 PM

so, -needs a title- it is then. lol

Doing me, it's the best.

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