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XOx Uriah xOX
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since 2006-02-11
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Virginia

0 posted 2008-10-08 03:42 PM



Harvey was a wet brain
His skull was a bowl of mush
There weren't any ideas rattling around
They were bogged down in the slush

Waiting on some boot leg knotty head
in an apathetic part of town...
he met a hostage tied in grape vines.
The whites of his eyes were brown.

In a battle over the Devil's pee,
the wino shoved the dagger in...
Harvey filled the gutter
with a flood of blood and gin.

Sometimes you didn't listen
Sometimes I didn't talk
I know there's been times in the past
when we helped each other walk.
There's no use feeling guilty
when old ghosts come around.
Sometimes there aint no place to crawl
and you watch it all go down.

***

© Copyright 2008 Larry F. Leake - All Rights Reserved
viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
1 posted 2008-10-09 02:09 AM


Far too true. Thus is life.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
2 posted 2008-10-09 11:05 AM


There's no use feeling guilty
when old ghosts come around.


enjoyed these two verses and all the poem too....


yann

kanashe
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since 2008-05-21
Posts 59
america
3 posted 2008-10-09 03:36 PM


clever title
enjoyed your poem

-ashe

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2008-10-09 05:35 PM


Enjoyed...James
WTBAKELAR
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Utah, USA
5 posted 2008-10-10 09:53 AM


Larry, I was surprized by the 4th verse,  It is very good but seemed like it belonged in another poem.  I wanted to hear the rest of the first three verses.  To me this seems like 2 different stories.  It left me wanting to hear more.   Tracey.
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