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Musel
Junior Member

since 2008-07-17

Posts 34

0 posted 2008-07-17 05:04 AM

Tonight I had an inclination,
To put like words in combination,
To put them all now in relation,
This little thing of my creation.

So I've succumbed to fascination,
My pen proceeds to battle station,
My mind should act with inspiration,
To this semantic application.

On page it now has preservation,
Inside it gains appreciation,
When fears receive exoneration,
When thoughts in words provide elation.

This may put you into sedation,
You may not feel the same sensation,
Yet this is my infatuation,
And so it needs no adoration.

I write to relay information,
Without any consideration,
To a critic's choice of condemnation,
Of a poem that's built on no foundation.

So now I'm near the culmination,
Of a stream of thought;imagination,
Varied like the constellations,
United whilst in segregation.

And so ends this investigation,
While not without exasperation,
Has helped me in my navigation,
This little thing of my creation.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2008-07-17 06:04 AM

A clever write. Enjoyed it!

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Musel
Junior Member

since 2008-07-17

Posts 34

2 posted 2008-07-17 06:35 AM

Thanks man, much appreciated

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-07-17 12:34 PM

Wow! A master of the written word, Enjoyed.
Ida

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2008-07-17 12:46 PM

An enjoyable word-trip through your imagination!
Welcome to the blue pages.

Musel
Junior Member

since 2008-07-17

Posts 34

5 posted 2008-07-17 01:09 PM

why thank you indeed,, I actually had about 4 more stanza's but felt they made it too drawn out and it lost it's freshness... But it is the first poem i have ever written so I'll always be fond of it..

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2008-07-17 01:23 PM

Yo Musel,

This is kind of fun. Keep working at your writing.

Bobby

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2008-07-17 06:36 PM

very clever write!

welcome to PIP!

Musel
Junior Member

since 2008-07-17

Posts 34

8 posted 2008-07-18 11:13 AM

I have added the missing stanza's to this poem,, I would welcome any feedback on whether you guys think it was better as the original or if it works being much longer... Issues in Communication 2 (expanded version) Thanks to those who have already commented

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