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Open Poetry #43

Isolation

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2008-10-06 10:40 PM

“Isolation”

Lonely thoughts linger
Deep within my mind

Emptiness fills my heart
While I wonder on alone

Greeted by a sea of clouds
Forever blocking heavens gates

So I stand here waitng
Fading in the dust

Smiling as the leaves dance endlessly
In this atume breeze

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (10-07-2008 09:08 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2008-10-07 07:29 PM

Hi, Lone Wolf.
"Greeted by a see of clouds
Forever blocking heavens gates"
Or 'sea' of clouds? It could go either way, with an unusual twist if you meant 'see.'

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2008-10-07 08:36 PM

midnitesun expressed exactly what I was thinking...please clarify so we might know which way to go...thank you so much

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

3 posted 2008-10-07 09:15 PM

Hey sorry about that,I meant it to be "sea"

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

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