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graeshine2006
Member

since 2008-06-03

Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA

0 posted 2008-10-06 04:48 PM

From its’ home
bursts its’ beauty

one second,
one minute,
one day,
one season.

       Then
           petals fall,
one by one,
     sailing down,
          finding ground,
         blown away,
                    buried,
         trampled,
             maimed.

Smile for the petal gone,
for the flower it had been.

Would you rather miss the bloom?

Beauty never realized?
Beauty never justified?

I, for one, rejoice.
The flower was…
     and that is all that matters.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2008-10-06 06:18 PM

can't believe I'm the first on this...unless someone slips ahead...MUCHO ENJOYED....and I agree, so good at least that it was...and even better if I was able to see it.

j.

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

2 posted 2008-10-09 12:23 PM

It was great to read my would be grand-daughter's latest poem, thanks for sharing.

Love to you dear lady.

Lindsay

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2008-10-09 11:24 AM

Smiling with you on this one...

It was, indeed!

Aunt K

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-10-09 01:20 PM

I love the philosophy of this beautifully presented poem, dear Debra. You are so right.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

[This message has been edited by Margherita (10-09-2008 04:01 PM).]

Joe Houck
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

5 posted 2008-10-09 04:33 PM

this is great. very straightforward and still elegant.

graeshine2006
Member

since 2008-06-03

Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA

6 posted 2008-10-09 04:34 PM

Thanks so much for the comments all! Very appreciated.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2008-10-09 11:06 PM

Debra~
Not only is your poem lovely ...
your photo is gorgeous!
Thanks for sharing both~

I, for one, rejoice.
The flower was…
and that is all that matters.'

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

8 posted 2008-10-11 11:35 PM

Yo dear Graeshine2006,

I like the idea of this poem. What I don’t quite understand is the apostrophe after “its”. “Plain old “its” is the possessive of “it”. I might be missing something, I've never been good on these things.

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (10-12-2008 12:17 AM).]

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2008-10-12 02:28 AM

Lovely poem, Debbie - I think my favourite of yours, but difficult to remember all of them at once.

Yes, Bobby is right. The apostrophe shouldn't be there. While the apostrophe usually shows possession, as in "Debbie's poem", when used in conjunction with "it" - as in "it's" it is showing an ellipsis (missing part) and means "it is". When "it" is used with an "s" to show possession, there is no apostrophe, thus "its beauty".

- Owl

graeshine2006
Member

since 2008-06-03

Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA

10 posted 2008-10-12 09:30 AM

Bobby, Dianne, Marge - everyone; Thank you and I'm glad the poem seems to be to everyone's liking. Did I use that apostrophe correctly ... lol. Thanks for the critique and I will try to watch the grammar! Appreciate you all so much!

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