Open Poetry #43 |
Outside Sunday |
1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Outside Sunday it was a turbulent Sunday the sky showed misty time October has some kind of hold between the cold and warm that only lets me edge through the twitching under my skin early I woke to the working bell and dressed in uneasy silence driving to the guarded gates where humpty dumpty lives and I felt comfortable behind the bars and slamming doors for it locked the storm outside "no darkness has ever been deep enough to extinguish my personal knowledge of love" Anne Rice |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I like this line "where Humpty Dumpty lives" Enjoyed the idea of locking the storm "out" Ida |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow! Really liked the words here, my friend...made your point and then some. j. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
interesting choice of words...they work well...thoroughly enjoyed |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"October has some kind of hold between the cold and warm that only lets me edge through the twitching under my skin" yes Helen I know that twitching beautiful! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
driving to the guarded gates where humpty dumpty lives and I felt comfortable behind the bars and slamming doors for it locked the storm outside I love the way you wrote that...... It describes it perfectly. Hugs, Ethel |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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sklagurl17 Junior Member
since 2008-09-08
Posts 43nc. |
"I felt comfortable behind the bars and slamming doors for it locked the storm outside" This is a magical place that I dream about -Tabitha |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very captivating read and the unexpected twist at the end made it more unique |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
1slick_lady - don't know what more I can add except you do write well, and with feeling... BC |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Wow! This packed a powerful (but gentle?) punch and has my mind reeling with all the possibilities of what you could mean. I don't know whether to be calmed by it, or unnerved. Beautifully written, as always. - Owl |
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