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ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2008-10-05 11:24 PM

I have some time left
not too much at the end
of the day when the whistle blows
and everybody on the coach
has to leave.

the whistle blows
it blew
the wry air resonating
with sounds of fair trade
not too much at the end
just enough for iron clad wagons
to collect
expert passages performed between
commerce and its people
before ends of coal shoveled days.

I say the the tracks of time
like rails keep trains
in line
even the most sleek
from jarring sculpted surfaces..
the whistle passes by many an open window
as the mind marries itself to thoughts
of continued voyage
yet time marches on
as coaches do on rails
even though there aren't many
who grace the lacquered wooden slats
called seats
when conductors waved their fare on
clutching a watch on a chain
a flag in another
there wasn't much time left

I say the steam did startle those latecomers
ones who wanted the clock to freeze
so spirits could linger on coach steps
to say 'stay behind'.
There is some time left
yet again
before the next departure..
and we toss and turn
at the worry of
who waves whom off
to stave off
the boredom of being left behind.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-06-2008 04:12 PM).]

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2008-10-06 01:18 PM

Very thought provoking write, ecrivan.
Enjoyed.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2008-10-11 10:36 AM

quote:
the whistle passes by many an open window
as the mind marries itself to thoughts
of continued voyage

Dear Martin, good to read you again and with such an impressive, beautiful write!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2008-10-11 10:59 AM

thanks! Oops-third stanza ought to be in the present at the end

Martin Dansky

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