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| Open Poetry #43 |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Lost” Lost in a sea of endless dreams Shattered and broken I fall to my knees Lost in a storm of endless hurt Tattered and torn asunder I fall to my knees Lost in an inferno of endless despair Crushed and cracked I fall to my knees When all hope is gone I look up And I fall to my knees Lost in your eyes It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo LoneWolf, This is well done. It's the only unpunctuated, and unmetered poem I've ever liked. Bobby |
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FNG Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477 |
" I look into your eyes".... Just wondering, whose eyes? God's ...enlighten me... FNG |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Wow - I liked this a lot. Very nice. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Nice job... I think the eyes are that of the person spoken of throughout the poem... That's how I want to see it anyway.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thanks everyone for the comments. Susan you are right, it is about a person. But FNG I see how it can be seen in that light, I didn't even realize it till you said something. Thanks. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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turbulent_melody Junior Member
since 2008-10-01
Posts 22Australia |
I enjoyed this as well, minimalist and moving. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
"Lost" is very powerfully expressed here. Love, Margherita |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I also see it the way Susan did. Nicely done. M |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
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