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poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-09-24 11:03 AM

Autumn number
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A tilted road meanders through
the yards of autumn. Perfect
maples burn with desire
to be admired. You can
stand here for a lift that
you really do not want,
forever. Like that boulder.

Or you can visit uncle’s
home at a “half an hour”
distance away, till now promised
but not visited. You almost
set out until you realize
he has been dead since last fall.
Ash. An ash dog is crossing
the road. Ask it to come home
and reload the idea
of a home. It is a time
you will crave for a partner
to cook for and to rebuke.

So many things have left you,
so many things that could have
been renewed like that lapsed card
of library. For now the dog
will do for a talk partner.
© 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

clever talks delay friendship!

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

1 posted 2008-09-24 01:50 PM

a bit confusing but very beautiful.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2008-09-24 02:51 PM

Oh my, this is a real beauty! The opening lines artistically set the scene, and you paint your characters with an intimate yet gently distant brushstroke. Very fine write, my friend.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2008-09-24 04:27 PM

This is Poignant, I like the melancholy and the story about the dead uncle and the dog...It's quite delicious.

regards

yann

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2008-09-24 05:55 PM

good one

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2008-09-25 01:05 AM

A feeling of longing here but a very sensitive and thoughtful write.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2008-09-25 12:10 PM

Dear Ku, you do autumn justice with this melancholic write, very beautifully done.

When my own uncle died last week, I was really grateful for having visited him and my aunt for a last time not long ago. The older I get the more people move on ... it IS the touch of time passing so quickly you can't grab it.

Thank you for sharing your realism in such a wonderful creative way.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2008-09-25 01:16 PM

Kushal, this is beyond exquisite - the layers, the network of little pathways of thought leading off from bigger ones, reveals the delicious intricacies of your mind. I especially love the dog.

- Owl

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