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Open Poetry #43

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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2008-09-17 07:31 PM

              Partings

You walked into the setting
    sun
looking back only once,
(with a stranger’s face)
as the cold twilight
embraced your vanishing
    point…
and a stark, full-moonrise
shook the emptiness.

            ---b.e. adams (9/17/08)

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (09-17-2008 08:02 PM).]

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-09-17 08:18 PM

Yo Secondhanddreampoet,

This works well. Yes, that's the way it's done. Some walk towards the rising sun. They never go back.

Bobby

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

2 posted 2008-09-17 09:15 PM

I have been in this scene. You describe it perfectly, poet.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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3 posted 2008-09-17 10:07 PM

nice...so very nice...loved the emphasis you place on certain words...just nice...

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

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4 posted 2008-09-18 03:36 AM

Wonderful writing, Bruce.

A

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2008-09-18 10:30 AM

Ouu!

I am loving this one. A perfect painting, with such sadness between the strokes of each brush of paint !

ARCTIC WIND

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18

Posts 498

6 posted 2008-09-23 09:45 AM

This very effectively written poem deserves another read by all. It is rather haunting, Poet! Well done!

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