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The Letter To You
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The Letter To You |
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A Beautiful Disaster Member
since 2007-01-13
Posts 409 |
Hello, I'm writing this to you As all the words are in the air; There's been no chance to prove them true, And in the wave of my despair I've nothing else to do. The breath of wind will dry my tears, The wind of change... but love's eternal, And with those tears it won't fade, I'll die - the flame of love will burn And dwell here till the end of days. And every time I see your eyes In my own world behind my lashes, The stars in our evening sky Seem bleak... and from tomorrow's ashes My hope revives. My love, you never broke my heart, As it was simply never whole. You've just picked up its every shard; Without knowing, you have stolen Them all... It's fate, it's not your fault. And, as you keep it in your hands, It's drenched in all of your misfortunes. To see your pain I just can't stand, Each of your tears is a torture... So give it all to me. We will withstand. Please, talk to me, please, let me hear Your voice, and tell me what to do To let you know I'm always here, To ease the pain you're going through. With love, I won't sign my letter. I am the one... you know who. The day... It doesn't even matter - It's one more day without you. |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
This poem overflows with such earnest tenderness and devotion. The only thing I could say as criticism is that I wish you would decide if you are using rhyme or not. Your use of rhyme is good and as I read I find that I expect the next stanza to rhyme - but it doesn't; then the rhyming returns once more. Just an observation. Do not go gentle into that good night. |
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