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Rollin' In the Old Pickup Truck
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Rollin' In the Old Pickup Truck |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Rollin' In the Old Pickup Truck (High Surf Advisory) Packed up my surfboard in my rusty old truck, the North Shore was rumbling so I thought I'd try my luck. A storm was brewing as I paddled from the shore, my old truck waited nervously as the waves stirred up more. I caught a big one and as it rolled into shore it tossed me and turned me to show me the score. It tossed me to shore and it was just my luck, I landed flat in the bed of my old pickup truck. JamesLee 05September 2008 |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Cool! I can just picture you and your old pick up truck.All wet, but filled with joy and life. Hugs BonBon  |
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MsMelissaMae Junior Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 26Indianola, Iowa |
What a great way to convey the fact that we all share a strange friendship with our automobiles! Fun read! |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
very tongue in cheek and funny. vivid descriptions |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Cute little poem, I hope you weren't hurt. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
James!!! This is totally awesome. The nervousness of the Old Truck, wow!  love, Margherita  |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
I dont know how true this is but I was once told "Don't let the facts spoil a good story." Good poem, well done. Do not go gentle into that good night. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
My old red F350 dually (named Clifford by my kids when they were little) salutes you and your truck! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A high five on the low side for both the chuckles and the admiration for waves and trucks alike. Well told. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I enjoyed every little bit of this! How sweet of your old pick up truck to catch you in his arms. Thank you for the pleasure of reading it. I used to have a Volkswagen Variant called Vernon. People would tell me that English cars are female. I would ask them how would Volkswagen Beetles be born if there were only bigger female Volkswagens. My current car, Gretta, a Volkswagen Jetta, is not so named because Gretta rhymes with Jetta. I didn't realise it until a few days later. I called her Gretta because there were 2 egrets near her on the grass where I first saw her. I thought Egret - Gret - Gretta. I named her the moment I saw her. My son said that I should wait a while, but I knew that she was Gretta. We get on famously. She goes almost without petrol (gas) and because I struggle to maintain her, she holds her breath and does her best. She has a heart of gold and when she sees a hill, she says, "Oooh Mommy there's a hill!" and goes zooming up it like a youngster in spite of the fact that she is actually 22 years old! - Owl [This message has been edited by OwlSA (09-07-2008 07:55 PM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Ouah James, it is really delectable, a very convincing poem that build up the mind with humour and simplicity...I really like this one and add it to my library... regards yann |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
James, You have me smiling with this one. It seems to be a departure from your usual style, and I like the light heartedness of it. A |
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