Open Poetry #43 |
Formula 1 |
Pestillence Junior Member
since 2008-09-03
Posts 25England |
Five red lights, Five red spheres, Five setting suns, Five bloody tears. These nervous seconds, We wait, baited breath Trapped on the start line, For the five light death. Always the worst time, Do I crash? Do I win? The crowd roars support My ears burn, deafening din. Green smites the red, Pedal to the floor, Tires screech, rubber burns, Into the distance and more. Blurring horizon, freezing wind, I throw myself through the bend, Terrifying speed, adrenaline, On the edge of life’s end. Desperate swerve around him, Flame kissing his carbon case, Gravel and metal collide, No time left, focus on the race. Through the never, Fearless, beneath the sky, Dodging fire, ducking air, This course I fly. Black and white heaven, Is waved before me, I raise my fist and punch The air with great glee. I stand atop the mountain, Taking pride of place, Come hell or high water, I won this race. |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
I rather like this "day in the life of a racing driver" It was a different subject matter - and it worked. Do not go gentle into that good night. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Good balance on the meter and read very well. I read it aloud the second time and it works even better. The subject matter is also one that is a refreshing treat. Very well done. |
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Pestillence Junior Member
since 2008-09-03
Posts 25England |
Thanks to you both, I often wondered why I haven't seen any poems about racing so thought I'd give it a shot, glad you both like it. |
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