Open Poetry #43 |
My River of destiny! (Semi-Finished!) |
Newpoet Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 72 |
I saw an imposing river, Far and wide. Men and Women followed, Who lived and died. A flowing river takes me where I want to be. It connects my life to the bottomless sea. Is there another option for me? A river or lake or ocean, In which I can not see? I discovered a brand new stream, It consists of an unknown theme. For where it leads me: I will not return. Will I be grateful or will I scorn? This chaotic stream clashes with my destiny. It could be the worst for me! I could drown upon each hopeful path. The afterlife might greet me through its wrath. I’m undecided. I can’t afford to lose. Life rushes by, while I almost choose. |
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Gumpy Member
since 2007-11-06
Posts 143Canada |
interesting read. I liked it very much. Gets ya thinking. Gumpy How is it that after your heart is ripped out, you feel so much? |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
It is very difficult to give a definitive comment on a half finished work. I would rather wait a while longer and read the finished piece |
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Newpoet Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 72 |
Thanks for the replies! It is basically done, but I still feel that there are some holes that I need to fill. |
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