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Obvient
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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My questions are so different now--like, "Who looks good in taffeta?" Perhaps a gal built like a broom? Or a thin man playing bride? I suppress the urge to lick my finger (cuticles are bit) as I idle my engine before I thumb advertisement assaulted by the noxious fumes of scented samples of the true essence of womanity. I smile to think in wonderment if anyone has smelled the scent of sweaty urgent loins of me before they dropped a droplet of whatever that smell just might be-- animal, or citrus juice? No matter which, it ain't the truth. I turn the page again and blue eyes (descibed as "piercingly") are vacant in their gaze at me. "Once," I thought, "I had such eyes" after I had spent the night sobbing in my sleep... My questions are so different now. I don't care to know much more if all we know's accounted for then give me innocence. I turn the page again. "She looks good in taffeta." I cocked my head and closed one eye. "If yer inta layer cakes..." I check my watch--the doctor's late-- hoping that's a sign that He is tending to humanity instead of wasting precious time as I age there, anxiously, comparing people to the gloss images before me as everyone sighs audibly, suppressing questions obvient: "Who looks good in taffeta?"? No, I don't believe that's it. We want to know-- "Who's next?" and this - "Am I even on the list?" Angelina's loveliness makes me feel inadequate, and I suppress the urge to lick my finger as I turn the page hostage to obedient vestiges of time. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I hate waiting in Drs. offices or any other for that matter as if my time is not as valuable...  M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are priceless, K. How many times have I had similar Q's when thumbing through those anal women's magazines. No one looks good in taffeta....well, maybe Twiggy or Audrey Hepburn could have pulled it off.  hang in there gorgeous. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 One for each of you! and "obvient"? *chuckle* My original title was not forum decorum.  Love you both... and Kace? Oh..I'm HANGING...lawsy.  (expletive gravity!)  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
ummm, children look great in taffeta when playing dress-up ... and I love your poem. Alison |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ooooooooooh.... Alison? nodding, you should write that, dawlin'! Thanks for reading me! A kiss for you too! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I was captivated by the brilliance of your beautiful mind woman! Great title, amazing spill! Angelina is so boring compared to you!  Keeping this one. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* YOU--are lovely, m'friend. I'm so happy to be here tonight, and thrilled if I can return the favor of the enjoyment of reading YOU. (Sometimes I just sit here and sulk, and read, yanno.) smile Angel--I'm not. But I do enjoy you ever so much K. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Ouu! I enjoyed reading your thoughts Serenity!!!! ARCTIC WIND |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
ive had those inside my own head conversations in the waiting rooms between waiting to rinse and spit a wealth of poetry sometimes writes itself in blooming colors |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A.W., Mish? (hmmm) awmish? AMISH? *chuckle* thanks, both of you. and to A.W. and to m'lovely!thank you both, very much |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
If this is what you serve us while waiting for the doctor, I think there was definitely the positive side in those idle moments ... Taffeta made me think of when - in the past - I had the patience to make a dress for my daughter. She used it perhaps twice, it must be hanging somewhere like a forgotten souvenir of other times. As a child she looked gorgeous in it, yes I agree with Alison here. It's a pleasure to turn the pages with you ... a real treat! Love, Margherita |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Time well spent in waiting if it produces charms like this, I enjoyed the read, great work Serenity. p.s. I used to look good in Taffeta, but now I feel that shot silk is the way to go.... but that's another story  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I'm on time, they should be, as well. But something always keeps me from thumbing through thumbed, drummed pages that are what, three years old, and the news is not new anymore, and the people in those pages have aged, and no one has yet to explain that to them; so I take my own books...or a pad of paper... sometimes I think the pad of paper, and my scribbling in it, gets me called into the waiting room a little faster [heaven forbid, she takes notes!] but once out of sight, then out of mind... but at least no one can now think that I'm going to file a report for tardiness.  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
A delightful portrayal of the frustration of sitting in a waiting room. I always enjoy wandering through your very vibrant mind. Loved the "aging" while you were sitting there. Hope the doctor made you well after all that time he kept you waiting. I love Sunshine's idea of having pen and paper in such circumstances. - Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
g'mornin'!  And yep, I usually have my own pen, my own paper, and I don't touch their magazines. Um. I'm a germophobe at the doctor's office. I'm bad. I feel like I'm sitting in a leper colony when I'm there.  But thanks for reading, and my love to all! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
see? How awesome...you are too cool Karen and the Angelina part..for sure  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
LOL...going to the Dr. in the morning...almost afraid of what I'll think when I start turning the pages...hmmm - definitely won't lick my finger after the first page....or then again, maybe I will...just think of all the people I'm "touching". Loved it... j. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
good luck, j! and it occurs to me I've written quite a few poems about ...waiting. Thanks again, everybody! Ya'll are all lovely.  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Not a moment wasted here, Ida |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 I kinda think I look rather good in taffeta over the holidays K, a nice emerald I absolutely never go to the doctor on time, neva!! This was a good "fly on the wall poem." Loved it lovey. |
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Lady Ayla Member
since 2008-07-19
Posts 84WV, United States |
You should ask your doc to display it. It's way better than anything a person can find in mags anyway. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Aye, you were right - we must have been separated at birth lol I was in the doctor's office last week, looked at a magazine, which I almost NEVER do, and saw a model in some outfit and I thought..... who could wear THAT? It didn't even look good on her. I get to go back to a different doctor next week. They have no magazines with models. They are all Neurology Monthly or something lol - and I keep hand sanitizer in my purse. Ohhhhh I SO love your writing. It talks to me like it has known me all my life |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Friggin' Fabulous. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grinnin' @ icequeen... Neurology Monthly sounds like you should have feminine products sticking out your ears!  (It's okay folks, she and I "get" each other's sense of humor!) Thanks for reading and replying too, viking. I keep hoping to come up with something new, folks, but when you don't know where it ends, it's kinda hard to start. |
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