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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2008-02-24 05:28 PM

Closet Meltdown

The drip drip drip of the melting snow
from the rooftop to the ground.
Words delayed by the cold of heart
turning feelings round and round.

Until...

Said, they were, in tantrum style
not usual for this one.
But time is running faster
with still so much undone.

Older...

Yes, the years are passing.
You'd think I'd be wiser now.
But advantage has been taken
and it's too much to allow.

So...

A louder voice from deep inside
escaped to create the mood,
with life on hold another year
and feelings no longer subdued.

Sighing...

Said I, too long, appreciated not
these last two months of toil.
I hate to burst your bubble
but this temper is about to boil.

Meltdown...

Tired of the opposite
of thoughts when helping out.
Contradictions raising ire
until the voice heard shout.

Now...

And then they came, those tears in flow
expressing pent up thoughts.
Not sure why this became the day
that one felt overwrought.

Continued ...

Even though I finished it,
with drill and screws in hand,
this meltdown kind of day today
was not what I had planned!

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-02-24 06:41 PM

The drip drip drip of the melting snow
from the rooftop to the ground.
Words delayed by the cold of heart
turning feelings round and round

I see so much beauty in your words, dear Maureen, even though you speak of cold of heart. May your heart stir and bloom into a new season of love and warmth.

Very beautifully done!

love and hugs
Margherita

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2008-02-24 06:42 PM

I love this Maureen... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

3 posted 2008-02-24 08:51 PM

I love your rhyming Maureen, well done.

Lindsay

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-02-24 10:15 PM

Maureen,

This is well written - I enjoyed it a lot and am sending along a hug to hang in your closet for a rainy day.

Alison

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2008-02-25 02:20 AM

enjoyed the writing style of this,
keep your calm
your inner piece.

Gloom

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

6 posted 2008-02-25 03:54 AM

Older...

Yes, the years are passing.
You'd think I'd be wiser now.
---------------------------------

Maureen, I really enjoyed the style of this. Very thought provoking words.

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

7 posted 2008-02-25 05:26 PM

The drip drip drip of the melting snow
from the rooftop to the ground.
Words delayed by the cold of heart
turning feelings round and round..."

Hi! I really like this part because I find it so descriptive. I really like this part

Thank you so much for this read

ARCTIC WIND

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2008-02-29 11:55 PM

I have read this several times and it makes me think of Poe...and I can not figure out why.

Great images, excellent writing, very expressive.

Thanks!

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

9 posted 2008-03-01 06:15 AM

Maureen

This is so good & touched me deeply, I cannot find the words to do it justice....The images conjured up by your eloquent choice of words / phrases has me speechless...

Superb write, John

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

10 posted 2008-03-01 08:52 AM

Thanks everyone, I am dealing with the aftermath of my (estranged...no legal seperation in PA)husband's DUI New Year's accident, which has him needing several kinds of therapy and the fact that his not being able to work or drive has put a mental,physical and emotional strain on me which hit its limit the other day.

M

ps I was building a closet for him...thus the title

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

11 posted 2008-03-01 03:21 PM

Dear M-
Sending healing thoughts your way. Understand that calling upon your personal hammer and nails can help you to build what it is you'll need to weather the storm.

Indigo

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