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Inspired-8
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Pluto

0 posted 2008-07-01 03:48 PM



If only for

A moment more

To see your smile

And talk awhile

If only I

Could see you now

A little time

If somehow...

© Copyright 2008 Victor Duna - All Rights Reserved
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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Antarctica
1 posted 2008-07-01 08:24 PM


Beautiful X 3.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
2 posted 2008-07-06 01:27 AM


Victor... if all our 'if's' came true... we would still yearn for something more I think... a wonderful offering here... keep smiling my friend.. love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2008-07-06 02:23 AM


this was sweet!
OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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4 posted 2008-07-06 04:01 AM


Victor, it is good that you can turn your pain into beauty, in the form of this poem that is beautiful in its simplicity like an ancient Greek temple (as opposed to a Roman one).  It is good that you have found a release for your pain - and that it is a positive release that is productive of further release in the form of the response of the Pippers here.  It is good for us to be able to enjoy your poem and to try to alleviate your pain.  Keep writing and you will find in time, that - like the relaxing release that comes after sobbing - you will find a new dawn.

- Owl

[This message has been edited by OwlSA (07-06-2008 06:17 PM).]

Inspired-8
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Pluto
5 posted 2008-07-06 04:10 AM


how very sweet thank you Owl!! and my fav Heart and RDB thanks !
JamesMichael
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6 posted 2008-07-08 04:24 AM


Wonderful...James
Margherita
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Eternity
7 posted 2008-07-08 05:16 AM


If only ... sigh! I think all those who have ever experienced love and the missing of it, can relate. And how many are these? Everybody who breathes on this Earth I guess!

May the sighs of sorrow soon transform into sighs of joy again.

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2008-07-08 09:02 AM


yes, I have felt this many times...

beautifully written

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