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Frozen Breath |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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FROZEN BREATH 27 February 2007 Her crown of grey weighing heavily, with bowed head and glazed eyes, she sat alone in her room and nobody knew not even the grey-day rain outside her window. Slowly her head shook from side to side in shock and disbelief, not understanding her daughter’s long-lived hate. - Owl |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...this struck me as incredibly powerful. Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Shock and frozen breath are the right words for such a sudden discovery. Almost unbearable. Powerful write indeed, dear Diana! Love, Margherita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow, Diana. This shook me and then slapped me. I have no idea what to say.... Ida |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
your grey is somber and powerful here |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Very nice work Owl, the solitude of the king however powerful he is has alway frightened me, I said that because of the first verse and sometime the solitude of the poets.... I wish your daughter is fine with her consciousness... sorry for that misunderstanding, it is always misunderstanding.... yann |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I'm hoping that warm hearts will thaw this glacier of communication between you both. And that cool waters of affection break through, and spring eternal. Hugging you sweet friend. ((((((((((Diana)))))))))) Rich  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Eric. I know you were talking about the poem, but the situation pretty much hit me in the solar plexus, I must admit. Thank you Margherita. Yep, almost unbearable is putting it mildly. Thank you Ida. What you said is warm support, just the way you said it. Thank you Helen. You shared the burden in your reading of it and your comments. Thank you Yann, for your kind support. However, it isn’t a misunderstanding. I thought it may be that, but I discovered that she wants it to be so - and to change the situation would be taking something away from her, or so, I believe she subconsciously believes. She needs to be – and to tell the world – that she is an unloved daughter. It is part of her image and who she believes she is. It tears me apart for a million reasons. Richy, thank you for your beautiful wish, but, as I said to Yann, above, she doesn’t want it fixed. I have tried everything I can think of for twenty years and will do so for another twenty and another and another, and will continue to do so from beyond the grave, but I know that it won’t change. Thanks for the hugs. You can’t know how well-timed they are. - Owl |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Powerful? This kicked me in the groin. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Oh Diana... I feel so bad. You are too lovely a lady for this... but it does my heart good to see these words "I can think of for twenty years and will do so for another twenty and another and another, and will continue to do so from beyond the grave." We can never fully know anything. Prayers, wishes, hugs, and kisses to you. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ouch! Sorry, Brett! :[, but yes, I know what you mean. Thank you for your support. Thank you Debby. Yes, it hurts, but it helps to read such lovely family stories as yours - and I do have my wonderful son - not that my daughter isn't wonderful too, in her own way, not that she allows me to know her more than the absolute minimum any more. Yes, I will never give up on her, in spite of the fact that realistically and objectively I really do know that there is no hope for change. I don't think that a miracle would have any effect in this particular case, unfortunately. - Owl |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
very powerful work Diana and so sad  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Kate. Hugs - Owl |
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