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Sing to me summer
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Sing to me summer |
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KeyLimeSorbet Member
since 2008-03-05
Posts 74Colorado |
I stop for a second, I take a deep breath. I let my mind beckon, “What do I have left?” Now that despair takes none of my time, I’ll realize the beauty of the great divine! I step outside and what do I see? All the wonders the world has to offer me! Fresh summer grass, I know it wont last, But I have until fall To walk on it all! Water is my true weakness, I am bound only by this: Day and night the water calls me to swim, The daytime is hot, I’m ready to jump in, But the night is so cold I think I would lose a limb! Thunderstorms I pray for as well, Ones with thunder and lightning that crackle from hell! Heavy raindrops falling from the sky for the duration of a day. I don’t want to see the sun, not even a white cloud, just gray! Open wide my windows for I want to hear the sounds, That the summer offers with its dark graceful rain clouds. Summertime, After many years I am finally ready, To see you for all your beauty. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Sometimes when other poets read poetry they look for things involving the mechanics of writing. I look for substance, as I have zero training in the art. The substance of this piece was a purely pleasurable experience. Thank you! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
There! You wrote about rain, as you said you would. I can smell the wet earth after the summer rains. Much enjoyed. - Owl |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thunderstorms rock...we get enough of them in summer, don't we?  and yes, I wish it would rain all day!!what did Cartman say? We have two seasons, Winter and July  |
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KeyLimeSorbet Member
since 2008-03-05
Posts 74Colorado |
XgarapanX- I’m flattered J I think its funny that you say you have no training for the mechanics of poetry, because I find your words of conversation to be very poetic in themselves. Owl- I try to keep to my words J I wanted to write about something that made me happy, maybe after it rains I can write about the smell of drying roses and wet earth ! Sea- hahhaha, well you know where I come from, we had two seasons, summer and mild summer! I cant wait for a thunderstorm here, im tired of the fifteen minute “rains” ( you and I both know what REAL rain is like) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 for sure dude... yeah I agree this, bam! then gone rain sucks...such a tease.... I'm hoping that this Fall will give me all day rain...we can hope, right? |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
I really liked this. Makes me REALLY want a thunderstorm and REALLY greatful that I have a yard to mow!  |
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BugBuggy Member
since 2005-12-19
Posts 130michigan |
enjoyed the images this brings to my minds eyes..good reading BugBuggy |
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