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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

0 posted 2008-06-19 10:13 PM

Our poor kids
across the street
in the playground,
they play rough games.

Constantly competing,
to see who’s best.

That’s just the way it is,
and they fit right into the mold.

They’ll make good soldiers,
making the world
what you need,
and want it to be.

It’s the way we make them
here in the hood.

It pisses me off,
you don't deserve
our poor kids.

Bobby

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2008-06-19 10:24 PM

If I may be honest, I was almost prepared to be disappointed with this poem until I got to the very end. Then I saw the substance I always look for in a piece of written work. The end winds it up nicely. One great point, simply said. I likey.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-06-19 10:37 PM

Thanks dear XGarapanX,

I'm more than pleased you caught my drift.

Our Memorial Day parades here in the hood are way too big, and long, and then there are the speeches, they are almost an apology.

Bobby

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-06-20 01:24 AM

There is more than a little truth to this one, Bobby.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-06-20 01:45 AM

Yes, dear Bobby, sadly that's the way it is, but oh how I wish we could love the world into change!

Very impressive.

Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

5 posted 2008-06-20 10:45 AM

Thanks dear Ida,

You've got it hon. Rich old men make the wars, and poverty stricken kids fight them.

Love Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2008-06-20 10:47 AM

Thanks dear Margherita,

That would be great Hon.

Love Bobby

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

7 posted 2008-06-20 01:12 PM

Great write, Bobby, dripping with truth we often don't want to hear!

Art

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

8 posted 2008-06-20 03:46 PM

Thanks Art,

I'm very pleased this one worked for you.

Bobby

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2008-06-25 10:10 PM

impressive!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

10 posted 2008-06-25 10:20 PM

Thanks dear Passing shadows,

I may be wrong, but perhaps you know what this is all about.

I'm very pleased it worked for you.

Love Bobby

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2008-06-25 10:28 PM

Nice writing...James

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

12 posted 2008-06-25 11:33 PM

It certainly worked for me as well Bobby,

a very good post, sad but true.

Lindsay

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

13 posted 2008-06-26 10:39 AM

Thanks James,

I'm pleased the poem worked for you.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

14 posted 2008-06-26 10:41 AM

Thanks LindsayP,

For the kind words on this poem. Yes, I always thought it was very wrong, and sad.

Bobby

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