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saved_by_grace
Member

since 2005-01-08

Posts 332
In the arms of God...

0 posted 2008-06-19 08:53 PM

Hey, Gang. It's been a LONG time since I've been able to write something. So I've been trying to finish things I started a while back. Please take a look at this one and share with me any ideas on where I might 'tweak' it.

Thanks a bunch!! : ) ~ Becka
The One

Until I met you in my dreams
I never thought I'd find...
the flawless puzzle piece of love
to fit this heart of mine.

But from the moment I awoke
I knew God had a plan.
To bring "the one" into my life,
my view of the perfect man.

I jumped online one spring-filled day
to find a brand new friend.
Instead I found the deepest love
I never want to end.

You've said my heart is safe with you
and so I've opened up...
and tore away the guarding walls
in hopes of charming love.

You've made me laugh and challenged me
and opened up my eyes.
You've showed me the way love should be
and changed my entire life.

I hope one day you understand
the depth that my love flows.
It reaches to the core of me
and everyday it grows.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2008-06-19 10:19 PM

I'm not much of a critiquer since I'm very new to poetry and have no education in it (well, actually, no education to brag about at all) but I can say that this poem shows alot of gratitude for a good thing. maybe matches truly are made in heaven, as they say.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-06-19 10:23 PM

Yo Becka,

This is way fine work. It works well. It's well, graceful.

Love Bobby

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2008-06-19 11:21 PM

I like this very much. We should all be so lucky to feel secure in our love.

Great poem!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-06-20 03:12 AM

I think this is very well done and delightful. It's always a great joy to find "old" poet friends from Pip returning.

Love,
Margherita

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