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the flesh of hurt |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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a ramble of sorts ~~**~~ here is how I hurt in the memory of such orchids they bleed like innocence’s some element of color blue, green, pink their flesh of winter/s I hurt because I can because it bears no witness to my tongue because it bears no witness to the glass that shatter/s-- but the memory is there in some silver light that begs my attention in your palm; like a child praying & rain storms breathe heavy-- wrapped in their own small language a cradle of some love, long forgotten how precious the blue; your color, when I remember such visions to behold once more I am tangled in some color of the moon some pureness-- wishing and waiting for the rise the seek of long hours -- each garden to lay beneath my sleep the sorrow of my dreams hovers over the green song- when I can arise and say there is no darkness in my nightmares -- but I am a reckless soul-- searching for the secret-- learning the speech of echoes in such rivers-- when you bear wildflowers and hold your palms closed-- when my eyes forget the difference between night and day-- the same green weave I've made-- I imagine you at the edge of my language your reflection stirring the day before the world can translate a meaning and daylight falls dusk to twilight in silvermemory ~~**~~ Life isn't about how to survive the storm, but how to dance in the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (06-19-2008 11:34 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is awesome! So many poetic heights. Good to read you again, dear Lauren! Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I have one criticism of your poetry and it is a very serious one. We get far too little of it! When I see a Greeneyes poem, I pounce on it, save it into my Greeneyes folder even before I have read it, read it, savour it, experience it, read it again, and feel very smug that I can go back to it and read it again whenever I wish, even if I lose my Internet connection. As always, your poem is the essence of what poetry should be and do - and you sure have me dancing in the rain. - Owl |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Lauren it was all just so exquisitely Greeneyes but I happen to absolutely love this line quote: |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I hurt because I can because it bears no witness to my tongue because it bears no witness to the glass that shatter/s-- but the memory is there in some silver light that begs my attention ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Goodness, it's been too long and your poem is a reminder of just how much I've missed reading you. You grace the page with true beauty, Lauren~ Many hugs to you~ |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Oh my Gumbo! If you were looking for a way to intimidate a newby this poem did the trick. I'm slightly, well ok, largely awed. Wowzers! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"rain storms breathe heavy" always a delicious pleasure to read you. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Margherita -- thank you...  OwlSA-- Im thrilled that you enjoy my words, I never have the time Id really like to spend here....thanks so much! Sharon--hugsss and thank you for reading...how are your 'girls'?? getting big I bet ready for summer?  Lori-- so good to see you here! it has been awhile...thanks for stopping by.. XGarapanX--Welcome to PIP....I hope you enjoy your time here...thanks for popping in...  James--Hi there....thanks for signing your name... Susan--hugssss you....always a pleasure to hear from you.... ~~ hope everyone is doing well....thanks for the comments....love to all... ~~**~~ Life isn't about how to survive the storm, but how to dance in the rain |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Lauren, I hope you will be traversing these fine blue sands along the cybersea more frequently with posted displays of your grand-fine talent! ---the 'weaver' of second-hand dreams and 'Deep-Time' tapestries |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Lady Lauren, you always have a way with having a way...enjoyed this |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Beautiful! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Honest and true and without your delicate touch, this might have felt too raw... you have such soft edges lovie. You've been missed. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Bruce...thank you so much.... Dark~  love how "always" sounds from you...Richy....it's been awhile, I hope you will stay around.....thanks for stopping by... Karen~ I have MISSED being here as often as i'd like to be....sometimes my rambles just need to be read for my own sake of sanity....thanks for reading.... love to all....  ~~**~~ Life isn't about how to survive the storm, but how to dance in the rain |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow! This may be my favorite of yours. Eric |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
this is extremely beautiful, though a little sad.... |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Beee-autiful. (sigh)As always! How precious the blue indeed. Keeping. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
there are too many great lines to quote! I love this Lauren!! Stunning.... |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
WOW! This is one Great poem!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
My sweet sistah...your words are a balm, soothing the soul and you m'precious friend have been so missed. Sooo good to see your words again....Much love to you hon, don't stay gone so long ya hear?? Muwahhhhh |
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