Open Poetry #42 |
Flying with Chickens |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I climbed the bridge to catch the light but out of time and into night, I sought to find an easier way a way of taking back my stay - for time on earth was fraught with grief without the billows of relief. I have winnowed out the best as these corroded lines attest, but pain ensnared with ecstasy has no power to set me free - so lion taming without whips became the trials of slides and slips. I tried the layout of the lamb the foil to help me un-enjamb but paths too rigid to endure have brought no peace no sinecure. There’s nothing left that was delight so I stand poised, prepared for flight. The ceaseless echoes from the shore brought me round and back for more. Till Dargoroth takes me for his own I see through eyes of sin and stone that will not cede a heart to care - until I wake and you’re not there. Always do more than is required of you George Patton |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
No one can rhyme, have fun at the same time make sense the way you do! Impeccable rhythm and rhyme, and interesting storyline! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Keth! Life certainly is rife with "slides and slips"! Thank goodness for those "billows of relief." :pigtaisl: May your lion's heart continue to be courageous and help you overcome all of life's challenges. Linda |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Wow. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This not only took an education of the arts to a fine level, but the gift of an artist who has so many levels, thought we are finely, and then only frequently, scheduled to a few of them... :hugging you, your heart; write on, Keth... the world needs your light! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Such a pleasure to read! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I so enjoyed this!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, YOU ROCK, this is surely one of the best poems of the year! Without a doubt you are an amazing writer, and this is outstandingly good. Remember darling heart I'm studying the poets who are supposed to be the best, and this shows just how brilliant you are. The line and rhythm are what can only be described of as superb, with an artist touch of form that is unsurpassed by us mere mortals. Oh how I wish I had your talent As always Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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