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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Home ======== “Boys. Oh, boys.” She tells. The bouts of cough in between. The few of her pictures Resting on the table with A short leg. Sepia. A cup of tea long past its Prime time, now just stale Lies there in its lonely cup. The windows of the home Produce an afternoon, dull. Aunt doesn’t try to Conceal her chuckle over Memories of springs. Touches that should have happen And touches that have. Her rolls of stories unveil. Bored, I beg pardon For a world less humorous Than those sepia Stories, waits outside this home. Bidding farewell I turned to look at the old age home… An evening like a ripe melon is engulfing it… -- clever talks delay friendship! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. This is very good John . |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
There's a saddness here but the poem "tells it like it is." Well done. Ida |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Poddarku, You've been working hard, I can see. This one is very spare and very clear and you have a right to be very happy with it. Thanks for letting us see it. Your hard work is paying off. Sincerely, BobK. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ku... I do so enjoy your beautiful gifts of poetry  love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is so intense that it brought along deep melancholy, dear Ku! It means you succeeded in inserting a lot of emotion into your poem. Yes, indeed, very very good! Love, Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"An evening like a ripe melon is engulfing it…" Excellent imagery here, one can smell/taste/see 'aging/ripeness' vividly. Take a bow, poet! |
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