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Open Poetry #42

making matters worse

Ray Sharpe
Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 112
Tenerife

0 posted 2008-06-03 03:01 AM

Making matters worse
I write a line to start the rhyme my lips they start to curse

I find it hard to find the words to make a completed verse

I pace the floor with doubtful heart my head is fit to burst

I’m striving hard to find the words

To make a completed verse

The stars come out.. the feathered flyers sing

The world grows old with thoughts untold

I haven’t written a thing

You see it’s proving hard to find the words

To make a completed verse

With dreams to share …a heart to care

I’m making matters worse

You know it’s just so hard to find the words

To make a completed verse

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

1 posted 2008-06-03 03:24 AM

Wonderful Ray, few days back I wrote a poem on the very same topic. Nice write.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Ray Sharpe
Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 112
Tenerife

2 posted 2008-06-03 03:52 AM

lovely of you to be so kind ....I have enjoyed your poems imensely ....I must go and leave a reply!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2008-06-03 11:49 AM

Hi Ray, that's very lovely and very musical, I enjoyed the leitmotiv
I’m striving hard to find the words

To make a completed verse

it is very enjoyable and perhaps (I don't know) sincere

have a nice day

yann

Ray Sharpe
Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 112
Tenerife

4 posted 2008-06-03 12:20 PM

Hi Yann ..thanks ...yes it´s a little sincere ...you see i have only just started writing ...and I find myself searching for words worthy of inclusion on this lovely site ......where In france do you reside ...the girl I write about lives in Paris ...for now!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2008-06-04 03:03 PM

Hi Ray,I'm sorry I don't live in Paris, every foreigner thinking France think Paris but it is not correct I don't live in Paris, I live in a rainy city of the west : Brest, The region called Brittany is wonderful with lovely places and beaches but the climate is not sunny except during july and august...
Huglets

yann

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