Open Poetry #42 |
Song of the Hollow House |
unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Umber dreams and hollow houses Lay hushed in dusk, perfumed Blackberry vines choke the porches In lightless darkling mood Resigned, to strangled surrender The bramble holds me too The bramble holds me too. White milky breast has turned to dust The suckling lips, gone pale Bleat a quivering lullaby The barren cradle wails Wrapped in wraithweb, the rocking chair I cannot breech the veil I cannot breech the veil. Old willows bow in sorrowsong The path is overgrown Ghostprints lost, grow indifferent moss To suffocate the stone Wild briars bridle ages cold The ivy wraps my bones The ivy wraps my bones. Beetles heavy with bitter board Stand sentinel, until Bequeathed to worms, the ghosts are left To linger on the hill Withered hymn of hollow houses soulsick lyric, be still Be still Be still Be still [This message has been edited by unboundpoetess (05-29-2008 04:14 PM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
enjoyed it yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow, Heather, I don't know that I have read you before but I will be looking for your name in the future. This is so profoundly sad but wonderful writing. Ida |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Yann, I appreciate your time, thank you. Ida, I'm new here,(as I'm sure you can see) and have only posted one other piece. It's floating somewhere down below. I hope that you will visit again, and TY for the compliment. A pleasure to meet you both! ~Heather |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I love words...especially when they are used as well as you have used them...love how you employed repitition too |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
lAthis is poetry of a high order. Enjoyed it. Joyce |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
oooo...loved your style and poem! |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Wonderful atmosphere and use of words. Well done! Remember the three R's: |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Brilliant! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Wowee! Heather, I drank in every nuance of this with sadness and pleasure. As much as nature is wonderful, the absence of the human race from an area where once they were, and nature slowly taking over and hiding the traces, evokes such an aura of sad mystery, nostalgia and painful curiosity. I look forward to reading more of your work. - Owl |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You express the deep melancholy of a hollow house masterfully, dear unboundpoetess. Impressive work! Love, Margherita |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I agree that this is most impressive. So sad, haunting ... and you mesmerized me. Alison |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
enjoyed you here ms |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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doodlebug New Member
since 2009-04-17
Posts 2 |
Hi! I have been lurking around here and found this beautiful haunting poem. I know you wrote this a while ago. Even tho it's ghostly, it is almost romantic. Love, DB |
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