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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2008-05-27 03:44 PM


Take a whack front to back at this puzzle with me
or, up/down and around if that's what you prefer.
Hang a right at the light or a left and you'll see,
if it fits use your wits and great things will occur.

Don't give up if your cup does not run over first
even I had to try many times to succeed,
if you slack it won't track and may even reverse,
nicely done it will run in a way you can read.

Pick a pace and erase any doubt from your mind,
leave a clue, one or two, or perhaps none at all,
anyway what you say won't be easy to find,
in a while you'll be stylin' these things up the wall.

Never rest 'til you test what your mind can achieve
set a task and you'll bask in accomplishments' glow,
it's great fun when you're done for to see you'll believe
getting good which you could puts you right in the know.

Having left with a deft stroke of pen at the end
topics bound to be found to astound going down.

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (05-29-2008 11:21 AM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2008-05-27 04:48 PM


Dear William, I think this is a work of art really, enjoyed the internal rhyme.

I am not that patient and I fear I could not succeed in writing like this.

Bravo.

Love,
Margherita

Dr.Moose1
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2 posted 2008-05-27 07:29 PM


Dear Margherita,
It's really not as hard as it may seem. For the acrostic I normally pick a phrase that has fourteen letters ( three stanzas of four lines & an ending couplet, this one had four then two). The internal rhyme just happened to be one of Balladeers' assignments for the workshop, as well as the anapestic meter. Call it multi-tasking, but thank you very much. I'm kinda stumping for  the "Deer" these days although for the life of me I can't figure out why. He's such a brutal task-master, Lol. Be well,
Doc

steavenr
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3 posted 2008-05-28 11:17 PM


this works best for me read aloud in a rap style...nicely done
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4 posted 2008-05-29 01:54 AM


Moose, I'm a pussycat and you know it.

I'm just supposed to bring out the best in you. If this poem is any judge, it's working

Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2008-05-29 11:27 AM


steavenr,
Thanks, I can see where that might work. Although not a big fan of "rap" myself, many styles of poetry could easily be adapted to it. Right now I'm getting a picture of Shakespear all decked out in gold bling layin' down the beat.
Doc

Balladeer,
Thanks, did I say "brutal task-master?" what I meant was "true source of inspiration".
Doc

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