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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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and you whisper to my mind then about the pieces of you being your skin in moments like the glances of your eyes or a line on your neck where you leaned close to whisper and a memory remained before I even knew you name but I memorized your lips how they folded together into a maybe or perhaps, like a nonchalant over your shoulder little girl side I have seen you determined when your nails were red in sandals and you were just driving to get away from somewhere you hadn't been yet like there might be a stranger there noticing you in your new nylons or your arms when they were comfortable _______________ daark |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"and you were just driving to get away from somewhere you hadn't been yet like there might be a stranger there" wowsers!  I loved this part!! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suesea, thanks babe, I appreciate you |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Emotion filled words, it is as if every word was a single dancer who contributes to the harmony of the whole performance ... and you, the POET, are the choreographer ... an outstanding one ... Admiring you, dear D.! Love, Margherita  |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
"I have seen you determined when your nails were red in sandals and you were just driving to get away from somewhere you hadn't been yet" Your unique talent for potent provacative imagery remains unchallenged. You write like no other- a seduction of verse. sharyn "God made you as you are in order to use you as He planned" J.C. Macauley |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
What is it....better than other romantic birds n bees poem you always make me teary eyed... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend... _____________ ms shyvl thank you for letting me touch your thoughts ms ______________ ms angel....your eyes are lovely when wet..thanks babe |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I was trying to determine which stanza I liked best but I can't. Darn D....this moved me. Hugs, ~D |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D You know, I wonder if one could step into the mirror like Alice did. You know? You write wonderful like no one else. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms gs, thanks babe ______________ ms ali-san, would enjoy you with mirrors writing stereo just like you do, thanks babe |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I'm with my Ali-girl, you write wonderful Mr Daark! love RDBBe kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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