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me and the moon
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me and the moon |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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wander through my window see the moon with my eyes misted by clouds half-hidden half-hidden like me sometimes when I do my quiet thing loving the solitude alone time still peering out with one eye smiling at all I see below my ivory tower, I paint in primary colors bold and bright then fade inside like the moon this morning slipping behind the hill making room for dawn and the sun in its loud yellow dress, always reaching for attention we give up center stage lost in quiet observations me and the moon slipping off in quiet together --- Alison |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh, I know this place well. The view from here is exquisite! well written  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And your moon keeps sneaking smiles at me again (I just love that upside down crescent) You're developing an intimate way that's lovely to read, Alison. Much enjoyed.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nice imagery...well written...thoroughly enjoyed |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"we give up center stage lost in quiet observations me and the moon slipping off in quiet together" I loved the entire write but that last stanza wrapped it's arms around me and said welcome home! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Alison, I really like the thought behind this. Love Bobby |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
oh, this is lovely, intimate peek inside of you! R |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"the sun in it's loud yellow dress, always reaching for attention" (like Leos) what a great line! Wish I had thought of that. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Alison, I had read this quickly yesterday, but had no time to reply. Now in reading it again I find that this is my absolute favorite of yours. Simply exquisite, initimately soul expanding ... A keeper. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, can hear your laughter behind the walls here and your hurry steps chasing the wag of a tail ...enjoyed it ms.... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Alison - wandering through your window was a beautiful experience. Thank you! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, I can completely identify with your words. You have beautifully expressed my own moments of quietude of communing with the moon. This is most definitely a  Linda xo |
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RC Langill Member
since 2008-03-09
Posts 104 |
You skillfully establish an affinity with between yourself and the moon, but there is one key difference. When you can write words like these, your glow is not a reflection. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
You have written a lovely comparison between yourself and the moom. It is very introspective and telling. Thanks for sharing sharyn "God made you as you are |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
The metaphor of the sun in its morning dress is simply delicious! I can get inside this poem and abide the images and the emotions expressed. Superb craftsmanship topped off with a huge dash of fine artistry! Art |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Very nice Alison, I enjoyed this. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Beautiful friends of PiP, Thank you. xoxoxo Alison |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!! Ali-girl you make me smile! love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
RDB, I miss you and you make me smile too. Love, Ali |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, wow! I love this, Alison. I know the place and I love your word-painting and I love your writing style. - Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Superb Alison, the comparison between you and the moon is awesome, there is lightness and realism which sound like truth... thank you yann |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Owl & yann, You have both joined a wonderful group of people here in PiP that I have grown to cherish. Thank you. Alison |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Ali: That's one small stip for ... for a ... for a ... Alison!! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
xoxoxo and my thanks to you, Jaime. Ali |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Alison, i can see the silver moon through my window. Nice write. Prasad "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, a wonderful write here my friend, full of inner thoughts and truths that speak a thousand words, enjoyed this, thank you for sharing. Rick |
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Ray Sharpe Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 112Tenerife |
Alison ,this is a most beautiful piece....it captivated me ..... "we give up center stage lost in quiet observations me and the moon slipping off in quiet together" maybe so ...but when you speak the whole world is moved ...think about the tides....without the moon ...the earth wouldn´t function |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Rick & Ray, I came home after a long day of running around and smiled from your messages. There is something beautiful in what you each wrote. Thank you. Alison |
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DieterTaljaard New Member
since 2008-06-05
Posts 8 |
As the moon is shy as us,one thing we should remember is maybe the sun has the light of seeking his attention,but the moon has her beauty and soft light touch which guides us trough our darkest times.love your words,had me close my eyes to see :-) |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dieter, Thank you so much and welcome to PiP. I am off to read your poetry as soon as I have my first cup of coffee. Alison |
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