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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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he had called in the middle of the night wide-eyed, head thrown back high in the clouds his breath hot and short, I am in love with our insatiable thirst to sit by the bed for awhile dot every "i" cross every "t" We thought ourselves the lucky ones beneath the bedding our shoulders to the sky afraid of thunder I am thoughtless deliberation Each nerve between my legs, his the tasks of another world shimmering in the August heat. There's a naked tree right outside the window And I'm yammering how can the earth turn? our bodies step by step white-hot in secret Thunder in the highest state kneeling to breathe, to spill our secrets to finally lose control. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Allysa, You did it again - you just grab me with your writing. I always just find myself leaning into it. Thank you - the passion in this one is electric.(must be the Thunder). A |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Always welcome indeed! The senses are given their due attention. Well rendered. Love, Margherita  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I wish I was smart enough to totally figure this one out, for there lingers deep within the feeling that this one is far deeper than I have been able to decipher...it is so layered...love it because it required me to think... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You already know I adore you and this, is just teeth grinding intensity. I'm still waiting for that call, too. Um, NOW is good.   |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I am in love with our insatiable thirst..." oh that is good...all of it is, as usual, but I really liked that a lot. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
this is so...very good! R |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Trailing down the lines was, to say the least, a most enjoyable experience! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
" I am in love with our insatiable thirst" ~ Hmm, your hot little number here has me developing my own insatiable thirst! ~ for more of your hot schtuff! lol  Linda |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
reading the intricacies of your lines as they flow effortlessly down to denouement. Such a passionate piece of poetry sharyn "God made you as you are |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the naked tree works very well in this theatrical production of life love and art very moving |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Wooo whoooo, that's some steamy heat~ I absolutely love the energy and the passion!! Excellent poem, Allysa~ |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
I always enjoy your work. This one will go alongside several others of yours I have archived for myself, so it can imbue, even just a little, of its greatness on me and from there I can attempt to write stuff somewhere as good as this. I humbly hope. WONDERFUL as always. You have a tone and a feel that cuts right into me, every time. "Some rides don't have much of a finish; |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW! This generates enough heat to warm an Arctic winter night! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Allysa is amazing. I'm not sure if she's a poet or a carpenter, the way she hits those nails on the head: "I am in love with our insatiable thirst" my my my....  |
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