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Open Poetry #42

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Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

0 posted 2008-05-08 09:50 PM

It was half past
don't give a damn
and close
to what the hell

that the shadow
of white-line fever
crept across
that asphalt jungle

taking her back
to new smell leather
and dreams
of mosey town

where

sippin's for sissies
and every word
is drunk
with possibilities.

Indigo

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2008-05-08 10:01 PM

Clever write! Very enjoyable.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2008-05-08 11:27 PM

very very
extraordinary
with a twist of dark

SkaaDee
Member

since 2008-04-07

Posts 116
Canada

3 posted 2008-05-09 12:03 PM

really good.

I like the first and last stanzas best.

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

4 posted 2008-05-09 02:37 AM

Diamond-
So glad you enjoyed my ramblings. :-)

IG-
You know how that twist of dark gives things a whole new flavor. Thanks for dropping by.

SD-
Those were my favorites too!

Indigo

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2008-05-09 05:52 AM

ms indi, nice to see you spreading your thoughts here, enjoyed

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2008-05-09 09:54 AM

Remarkable write!

Love,
Margherita

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

7 posted 2008-05-09 02:30 PM

Dear D-
Glad to be spreading something... *grin* Thanks for the touch.

Margherita-
Thanks for the kind words!

Indigo

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