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Open Poetry #42

Definative Delicacy

Ri
Member

since 2008-02-01

Posts 67
Blackburn, England

0 posted 2008-05-13 10:37 AM

Definitive shadows of the trees becoming ever pale
as the world merges into a grey gloom
with juxtaposition losing it’s definitive detail
and the flowers have lost their will to bloom

Will a new definitive source of contrasting light prevail;
for the clouds conceal beauty and consume
all once darkly definitive as if a colourless veil
with a thickness ominous to entomb

This ship will sail out to sea with a delicacy tonight
for this voyage would be in vain without
the navigator’s essential delicacy of guiding light
which removes all of the storm’s prior doubt

The pen scratches the paper with delicacy as I write
discerningly, not knowing what about
yet reserving the delicacy to be painfully right
but the ink, like all else in life, fades out

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-05-14 10:13 PM

First, I love how you tied the stanzas together with the rhyme schemes...nicely done. Second (as far as content) really liked your last stanza best.

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