Open Poetry #42 |
The Sadness Of Brick Walls |
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
And I was once a wall while you were a wave crashing against me, but I denied the love you gave. Maybe I could say one day you finally broke through and I became a wave to dance with you. But now you are the wall and I'm tired of beating myself up against you, charging then retreating, my own love is defeating. Water flows the path of least resistance, and the sea is now calm and given in- so you stand there brave and tall because I care not for any brick wall, I'll remember you as the hardest of men. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Passing shadows, This is well done, and has a nice shape. It's always nice to be remembered as a hard man. Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is a gorgeous stanza!! Love, Margerita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I like this, Dixie. Ida |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hear, hear!!! My friend...perfect! Hang Tight! You're doing great.... jimmy |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Wonderfully Written ARCTIC WIND |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Very well done. I like the way you took the analogy and reversed it. Thanks for sharing sharyn |
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