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Hole in my life
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Hole in my life |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. 
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There's a hole in my life. It won't help to have a wife. I can't fix it like my car. I can't fill it at the bar. There's a hole in my life. Too many years of broken dreams. Too many girls who stole my heart. My thoughts and deeds wont be redeemed. No way to make a final start. There's a hole in my life. It won't help to have a wife. I can't fix it like my car. I can't fill it at the bar. There's a hole in my life. Too many roads to travel down. Too many ways to end up lost. And if the answer can be found. Who is there that could pay the cost? solo I wouldn't wish this on anyone. No where to hide, no place to run. The sinking sand I've stumbled on, Should be a rock to stand upon. So many lost forgotten souls. So many more will soon be gone. The endless struggles, foolish goals, and fiery darts go on and on. There's a hole in my life. It won't help to have a wife. I can't fix it like my car. I can't fill it at the bar. There's a hole in my life. Rick Delmonico [This message has been edited by rad802 (05-06-2008 10:09 AM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
This is a touching and sad write. I know about "them there" holes but too I know that we fix them ourselves and fill them with ourselves. That perhaps sounds selfish but it isn't really if one still maintains compassion and empathy for others. Broken dreams, sinking sands - yes, that and more is the essence of life if we focus on them and sometimes even if we don't think we are focusing on them. The trick is (maybe) to be aware of our thoughts and feelings and re-direct them should they dwell on what we don't want. I write it so I can know it. Thank you for making that possible. Helen |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
rad802, What does the word "wont" mean, or are you talking about "won't" Bobby |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I wouldn't wish this on anyone. No where to hide, no place to run. The sinking sand I've stumbled on, Should be a rock to stand upon. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That virtual hole is a rather empty feeling... I love the idea of standing on a rock in the middle of nowhere. Just me, trying to save myself!! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I like how the repetition gives one the feeling of just how deep and unrepairable that hole in your life is...good write...thoroughly enjoyed |
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