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I sat by her
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I sat by her |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
I sat by her, Her eyes stiffened me, She stared into me With my thoughts fallen Under the breath of my alcohol, I felt awkward, But the night swayed along, It didn’t phase a Saturday night Because I after all am just one person, One person that sees those I dislike become distant, Distant from where I’m going, running somewhere else, But she didn’t care, didn’t mind my voice was jaded, My thoughts couldn’t embrace it, And I wanted to touch her as if she was mine, But her eyes dimmed away, And now I must wait, I must wait another morning after. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Another love lost to the night right. Thanks for sharing sharyn |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. "Under the breath of my alcohol," So you were drunk, right? . |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
No, that line is suppose to emphasize my uneasiness, the awkwardness of the situation... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"And I wanted to touch her as if she was mine, But her eyes dimmed away, And now I must wait, I must wait another morning after" ...and, my soul, does it not seem we have all been there at one point in our lives? touching write |
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AAB Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 99Canada |
waiting and longing.. the worst of all things, I think. A very good poem. "Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Yes, the worst, sometimes it works out, makes it the best?? The glass half full approach. |
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