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Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

0 posted 2008-05-04 11:45 AM

From the Dawn

I made you a swing on the moon today
on a branch of a shadow less tree
We could sneak over there perhaps
when the earth blocks the sun
and the tides of wind are just right

I could push you if you promise
to hold on tight, this time
and we could watch our world revolve
as we spin through void's forgotten past
Or, we could take a ride on the merry-go-round
of Jupiter, and look down to where it all began,
and where it all, will never end

I wonder if we ever loved each other before,
and we know it, but we don’t
It could have been a parallel affair of some sort
on some moment less day
when prophecy was a promise
and heartbeat, was our only tongue

The stars in your eyes
melted darkness when I saw them
and it brought an invisible glow
from which cherished memories could be seen,
once again

I think I’m going to start sailing to the edge,
where the ocean drinks the sun,
and jump on
I’ll see you in the morning, hopefully,
from the dawn,
of our tomorrow

Freedom of expression is our, write.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2008-05-04 12:00 PM

"I think I am going to start sailing to the edge,
where the ocean drinks the sun." Love this,
very clever.
Ida

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2008-05-04 12:45 PM

Well done Richy, a soft and romantic
write.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2008-05-04 01:34 PM

Richy....I think you're walking on moon beams...such happiness I feel in this poem.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-05-04 01:38 PM

Some truly magical imagery in this deeply romantic piece, dear Richy!

It's such a joy to read you again.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2008-05-04 04:06 PM

Richy, the "R" in your name must surely stand for "R"omantic!!! ~
"I made you a swing on the moon today
on a branch of a shadow less tree"

"when prophecy was a promise
and heartbeat, was our only tongue"

~ Uniquely expressive turns of phrase!

"from the dawn,
of our tomorrow"

~ May all your tomorrows dawn with such joyful light!

A pleasurable reading experience!

Linda

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

6 posted 2008-05-04 09:05 PM

richy this was an excellent invitation to love. I was captured by this image"on some moment less day
when prophecy was a promise
and heartbeat, was our only tongue" Thanks for the pleasure of reading your work
sharyn

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

7 posted 2008-05-04 09:10 PM

"of our tomorrow"

or

"until then . . ."

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

8 posted 2008-05-04 09:14 PM

I think I’m going to start sailing to the edge,
where the ocean drinks the sun,
and jump on
I’ll see you in the morning, hopefully,
from the dawn,
of our tomorrow

Rich... this is just beautiful writing...and thank you also for the lovely comments you left on my work.. I appreciate you ... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

AAB
Member

since 2008-04-10

Posts 99
Canada

9 posted 2008-05-05 10:08 PM

YOur imagry is fantastic!

"Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride

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