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Winter's Requiem
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Winter's Requiem |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Gnarled brown skeletons wave fingertips splashed by frost. I battle the frozen icing, brush it away, away from the first budding leaves- pert, new green, and innocent. It is the changing of the guard, enacted on the stage of my backyard. the Winter's requiem, it's duty's done and Spring has begun to enter center stage. sharyn [This message has been edited by shyvl (05-03-2008 09:11 PM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Sharyn, beautifully expressed...Spring on the stage and winter behind the curtains waiting for the next show..... Enjoyed a lot. yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Sharyn, The idea behind this is fine. However, the capitalization is spotty. Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Impressive writing, Sharyn. Ida |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Wow, love how you bring spring into focus, almost magically!! The unfolding is crystal clear, and it's a beauty for sure. Pretty poem, shyvl~ |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thank you BlueSerenade- Thank you so very much for taking the time to read my verse and make such encouraging comments. I really appreciate. sharyn |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Sharyn, That's much better. Bobby |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Yes, I hear that the main characters in this spring play, have alot of growth potential, for a budding success. Really enjoyed your poem, and thank you for your gracious review. Freedom of expression is our, write. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Great read! What a nice feeling to this...I could almost sense the cold on fingertips, brushing slushy white from tender leaves. Well done.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Really enjoyed this...terrific opening stanza...saw everything.... j. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Sharyn... this is just perfect! love RDBBe kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very captivating visuals, dear Sharyn. Love, Margherita |
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